Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a complete response with a topic sentence and brief supporting detail. Avoid one-word answers; expand slightly (1–2 sentences) to show fluency and provide context or reason. Keep it natural and concise.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My family couldn’t afford one, so I usually walked to school or used public transport.

提案: Organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, "because", "for instance"). Reduce hesitations and grammatical errors (singular/plural agreement, word order). Use varied vocabulary (popular, common, practical, affordable) and limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are an affordable and practical way to commute. For example, many students and workers ride bikes to school and offices to avoid traffic and save money. In addition, bikes are common in smaller towns where public transport is limited.

× Uh, yes, bike is very important for our country because, uh, overall men are used for bikes in school, universities, college and other workplaces, uh, because bike is a necessary need for every single man And, uh, usually, uh, they use are very, uh, very responsible.

✓ Uh, yes, bikes are very important in our country because, overall, men use bikes to go to school, university, college and other workplaces, because bikes are a necessary means of transport for many men. Also, usually they are very responsible users.

Errors: singular/plural mismatch ('bike' vs 'bikes') and subject-verb agreement. Use plural 'bikes' when speaking generally, and 'are' with plural subject. 'Universities' plural but 'college' should be parallel; use 'university' or 'colleges'. 'Used for bikes' is incorrect word order and verb choice; correct to 'use bikes'. 'Necessary need' is redundant; use 'necessary means' or 'necessary' alone. Suggestions: use plural nouns for general statements, ensure verbs agree with plural subjects, keep parallel noun forms (school, university, college), and avoid redundancy. Use clear word order: subject + verb + object.