Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Give a fuller response: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., "but", "because", "so") and avoid one-word answers. Keep it natural and within 3–5 short sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my family lived in a city where buses were more convenient. However, I often borrowed my neighbor's bike on weekends to ride in the park. As a result, I still enjoyed cycling even without owning one.

提案: Improve grammar and clarity, use a topic sentence followed by specific reasons and linking words. Replace awkward phrases (e.g., "proper popular", "transfer") with natural alternatives like "very popular" and "commuting". Limit to 3–4 sentences and add a specific example or brief comparison.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for commuting to work or school. For example, in my city there are dedicated bike lanes and many students ride every morning. This makes cycling a practical and common mode of transport.

× Yes, it's very proper popular in in my country because many people use it for transfer, transportation, going to work or school.

✓ Yes, it's very popular in my country because many people use it for transportation, to go to work or to go to school.

The phrase 'proper popular' is incorrect: 'proper' is unnecessary and wrong here; use the adjective 'popular' alone. There is a repeated preposition 'in in' — remove the duplicate and use a single 'in'. 'Transfer' is not the appropriate noun for traveling between places in this context; use 'transportation'. Also improve parallel verb forms: 'going to work or school' is acceptable, but using 'to go to work or to go to school' makes the infinitive parallelism clearer. Overall, revise to 'very popular in my country' and replace 'transfer' with 'transportation'.