Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời khá rõ ràng nhưng cần chỉnh ngữ pháp, ngắt hơi, tránh câu quá dài và hoàn chỉnh ý cuối cùng. Cụ thể: (1) Thêm dấu câu và chia câu để tự nhiên hơn; (2) Sửa cấu trúc như “I used to” + hành động; (3) Hoàn thành ý bị bỏ dở (“at a ...”); (4) Thêm một chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tên công viên hoặc cảm xúc) và một liên từ hợp lý để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike around the city almost every weekend with my friends because we enjoyed exploring new parks and quiet streets. For example, we often cycled to Riverside Park and then stopped for ice cream, which made the outings really memorable.

提案: Câu trả lời ngắn, có lỗi chính tả và ngữ pháp, ý chưa hoàn chỉnh. Cần: (1) Sửa lỗi chính tả (“buys” → “bikes”); (2) Dùng cấu trúc mạch lạc: nêu quan điểm rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích với ví dụ hoặc so sánh; (3) Tránh để câu bị bỏ dở; (4) Dùng liên từ để mở rộng ý (e.g., “however”, “for example”).

例: I think bikes are quite popular, especially among children and students because many of them use bicycles to get to school. However, among adults bikes are less common due to long commuting distances and better public transport in cities.

× Yes I did I used to ride my bike around the city almost every weekend with my friends because we enjoyed exploring new parks and quiet streets, and sometimes we would stop for ice cream at a.

✓ Yes, I did. I used to ride my bike around the city almost every weekend with my friends because we enjoyed exploring new parks and quiet streets, and sometimes we would stop for ice cream.

The sentence lacked proper punctuation and ended with an extraneous 'a'. The main verbs are correctly in the past tense (used to, enjoyed, would stop), but the run-on structure makes it unclear. Correct by splitting into two sentences with a period and removing the stray 'a'. Also add a comma after 'Yes' for natural phrasing.

× I think buys are just popular for the children.

✓ I think bikes are mostly popular with children.

The word 'buys' is a spelling error and should be 'bikes'. 'Just' is not the best adverb here; 'mostly' or 'mainly' fits the meaning better. Use 'popular with children' rather than 'for the children' for natural collocation.

× The student use bike to go to school and the.

✓ Students use bikes to go to school.

There is a subject-verb agreement and number issue: 'The student use' should be 'Students use' or 'The student uses'. Also 'bike' should be plural if referring generally. The fragment 'and the.' is incomplete and was removed. Ensure subject and verb agree in number and complete the sentence.