Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (tense, articles, subject-verb agreement) and clarity. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it natural and concise (1–3 sentences).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my parents didn’t allow me to ride one for safety reasons. For example, they thought the roads near our house were too busy, so they preferred I walk or take the bus.

提案: Fix grammar and redundancy; use linking words and a specific example. Start with a clear opinion sentence, then add one reason and a brief example or comparison. Avoid repeating the same phrase.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my hometown in India because they are affordable and convenient. For instance, many families own at least one two‑wheeler, which is easier to park and costs less to run than a car.

× No, I have no bike when I was child because that time my family not allow me to drive the bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because at that time my family did not allow me to ride a bike.

Errors: present tense used ('have') with past time reference, missing article ('a child'), incorrect negation and verb form ('not allow' should be 'did not allow'), preposition and verb choice ('drive the bike' -> 'ride a bike'), and missing time preposition ('that time' -> 'at that time'). Suggestions: Use past simple for past events (didn't have), include appropriate articles ('a child'), form negative past with 'did not' + base verb, use 'ride' for bikes, and use 'at that time' for clarity.

× Yes, in my hometown India bikes are popular because everyone have a bike because it's not too expensive.

✓ Yes, in my hometown in India, bikes are popular because everyone has a bike, since they are not too expensive.

Errors: missing preposition ('in my hometown in India'), subject-verb agreement ('everyone have' -> 'everyone has' because everyone is singular), repetition and clarity ('because' used twice), and reference agreement ('it's not too expensive' refers to 'bikes' plural so use 'they are'). Suggestions: Add necessary prepositions, ensure verb agrees with singular indefinite pronoun 'everyone', avoid repeated conjunctions by using 'since' or rephrasing, and match pronoun number to its antecedent ('they are').