Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, remove fillers (uh), correct grammar (use past simple and articles), and give one brief supporting detail. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a motorbike as a child, but I did have a bicycle that my father gave me. I used it every day to ride to friends' houses and the local park.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, use correct vocabulary (bikes, not pikes), fix grammar (subject-verb agreement), avoid repetition, and add one specific reason and example using a linking word (for example, because, therefore). Limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes have become very popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient. For example, many people use bicycles or motorbikes to avoid traffic and save money on fuel and parking.

× Uh, I didn't have any bike in my childhood, but I had a bicycle and uh, it was a gifted from my father.

✓ Uh, I didn't have a bike in my childhood, but I had a bicycle, and it was a gift from my father.

The phrase 'any bike' is acceptable in negative sentences but 'a bike' is more natural here; however the main error is 'a gifted' which incorrectly uses the adjective 'gifted' instead of the noun 'gift'. Use 'a gift' to indicate a present. Also remove the redundant article before 'gift' and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: use 'a gift' when referring to something given to someone.

× Yeah in our country Pikes are nowadays become very popular because of its make people life easier to go anywhere even there even others others vehicle like cars, CNG buses don't have this kind of.

✓ Yeah, in our country bikes have nowadays become very popular because they make people's lives easier to get anywhere; other vehicles like cars and CNG buses don't offer this benefit.

Multiple pronoun and noun reference errors: 'Pikes' is a misspelling of 'bikes' (noun form). 'Are nowadays become' mixes present simple and perfect progressive; use 'have become' for change over time. 'Because of its make people life easier' is ungrammatical: 'its' lacks a clear antecedent and 'make' needs plural agreement with 'they'; correct to 'because they make people's lives easier'. 'People life' needs possessive 'people's lives'. The phrase 'even there even others others vehicle' contains repetition and wrong determiner; use 'other vehicles like cars and CNG buses'. Finally, 'don't have this kind of' is incomplete; finish with 'don't offer this benefit'. Suggestions: ensure subject-pronoun agreement, use possessive for 'people's', choose correct verb tense 'have become', and avoid repetition.