Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cần sửa ngữ pháp cơ bản, phát âm từ vựng không đúng (bike, buy, room...), và cấu trúc câu để trả lời rõ ràng hơn. Hãy mở đầu bằng một câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó cung cấp 1–2 chi tiết cụ thể (tuổi, ai tặng, cảm giác khi nhận). Dùng từ nối nếu cần để làm câu mạch lạc (for example, when). Hạn chế lỗi thì/thời, chia thì đúng (past simple).

例: Yes, I did. I got my first bike when I was eight years old because my parents gave it to me as a birthday present. I remember feeling very excited and I practised riding it every afternoon until I could ride without help.

提案: Cần làm rõ ý chính và sửa lỗi từ vựng/ngữ pháp (brighter → bikes? population → populous or densely populated). Trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích với lý do cụ thể, dùng liên từ (because, however) và cung cấp ví dụ cụ thể (e.g., traffic, public transport, economy). Tránh lặp từ và câu không hoàn chỉnh.

例: Bikes used to be very popular in my country, but nowadays fewer people use them because cities are densely populated and traffic has increased. For example, many families prefer motorbikes or cars for convenience and speed, especially when commuting to work.

× Yes I did, I think everyone always have a buy when were tried.

✓ Yes I did. I think everyone always had a bike when they were children.

Incorrect subject-verb agreement and other structure issues. 'everyone' is singular and requires 'has' or in past tense 'had' (Grammar problem type ID 27 and 5). 'have' is present tense; the sentence refers to childhood so past tense 'had' is correct (Past tense issue ID 5). 'buy' is a misspelling of 'bike' and 'were tried' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'were children' or 'were young'. Also pronoun 'they' should replace omitted subject for 'were'. Suggestion: use 'I think everyone always had a bike when they were children.' Grammar problem type ID:27

× The first time I have a room buy is when I'm 8 years old my parents gave me for my birthday present.

✓ The first time I had a real bike was when I was eight years old; my parents gave it to me for my birthday.

Several tense and word choice errors. 'have' is present tense but the event is past, so use 'had' (Past tense issue ID 5). 'room buy' appears to be a typo; likely 'real bike'. 'I'm 8 years old' should be 'I was eight years old' for past tense (Present tense issue ID 6 vs Past tense ID 5). Also sentence fragments and missing object: 'gave me for my birthday present' should be 'gave it to me for my birthday'. Suggestion: use clear past tense narrative: 'The first time I had a real bike was when I was eight years old; my parents gave it to me for my birthday.' Grammar problem type ID:5

× I think brighter are popular in my countries because my countries are very population so everyone change the the vehicle from bikes to to something.

✓ I think bicycles are popular in my country because my country is very populous, so many people change their vehicle from bikes to other types.

Multiple errors: 'brighter' is wrong word; likely intended 'bicycles' (Singular and plural issue ID 1). 'countries' should be singular if referring to one country (ID 1). 'very population' is incorrect collocation — use 'very populous' or 'has a large population' (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs ID 13). 'everyone change' needs subject-verb agreement and correct tense: 'many people change' or 'people change' (Subject-verb agreement ID 27). 'the the' duplicate and 'to to' duplicate typos. Pronoun 'their' needed for 'vehicle' (Incorrect use of pronouns ID 12). 'something' is vague; use 'other types' or 'cars' depending on meaning. Suggestion: 'I think bicycles are popular in my country because it is very populous, so many people change their vehicles from bikes to other types.' Grammar problem type ID:1}]}