Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap doğrudan soruyu yanıtlıyor ancak dilbilgisi hataları, tekrarlar ve anlamsal akış sorunları var. Cümle yapısını düzeltin, gereksiz tekrarları çıkarın ve 2–3 destekleyici ayrıntı ekleyin. Bağlaçlar (for example, because, so) kullanarak ifadeyi daha akıcı hale getirin. Ayrıca zaman ifadelerini ve duygu ifadesini daha net belirtin.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I used to ride it with my friend Mike on weekends, and we often explored nearby parks. Because we spent a lot of time outdoors, those memories make me feel happy and nostalgic.

提案: Cevap net ama kelime seçimi hatalı ('spikes' yerine 'bikes') ve tekrara düşülmüş. Sebep belirtilmiş ancak daha spesifik örnekler (örneğin altyapı, güvenlik, hava koşulları) ekleyin ve bağlaçlarla mantığı güçlendirin. Kısa ve doğrudan bir konu cümlesi kurup sonra 2 destekleyici neden verin.

例: No, I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. One reason is that there are not enough dedicated cycle lanes, which makes riding unsafe, and another reason is that heavy traffic discourages many people from cycling.

× When I was a child, I used to have a bike with Mike that I believe we were going on a bike on weekends and when I remember those moments it makes me feel happy.

✓ When I was a child, I used to have a bike with Mike, and I believe we used to go biking on weekends; when I remember those moments, it makes me feel happy.

The original sentence misuses the verb form 'going on a bike'. In English, the activity of riding a bike is commonly expressed as 'go biking' or 'ride a bike'. Also, the sentence needs clearer conjunctions and punctuation to separate ideas. Use 'used to go biking' (verb + -ing) to show habitual past action. Suggestions: replace 'were going on a bike' with 'used to go biking' or 'used to ride bikes', add a comma before 'and', and separate clauses with punctuation for clarity.

× Well, I don't think spikes are popular in my country. The reason that I believe that bikes are not popular in my country is that we don't have enough roads for this.

✓ Well, I don't think bikes are popular in my country. The reason I believe bikes are not popular is that we don't have enough suitable roads for them.

The original sentence uses 'spikes' instead of 'bikes', which is likely a wrong word choice (pronoun/word error). Also, repetition of 'in my country' is unnecessary. Replace 'spikes' with 'bikes' and use the pronoun 'them' to refer back to 'bikes'. Adding 'suitable' clarifies the meaning. Suggestions: proofread for incorrect word choices, avoid unnecessary repetition, and use appropriate pronouns to refer back to nouns.