Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep answers natural, concise and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), avoid fillers (“umm”, “thank you ma’am” is unnecessary), correct tense errors (use past simple: “I had”), and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, “because” or “so”) to explain why the bike mattered. Limit to 2–3 sentences to be more effective.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father bought it for me so I could learn to ride and explore the neighborhood, and I used it every weekend to visit friends and practice cycling.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repetition (don’t say “bike is Bikes”). Use a clear topic sentence, then give specific reasons with linking words (for example, “because” and “also”), and complete your points—don’t leave ideas unfinished. Use relevant vocabulary (“popular”, “commuting”, “exercise”, “eco-friendly”) and provide 1–2 concrete examples or comparisons.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in the Philippines because many people use them for short commutes and exercise. For example, cyclists often ride to markets or schools, and during the pandemic more people chose bikes as an affordable and eco-friendly way to travel.

× Thank you ma'am for that wonderful question umm sharing with you if I have a bike when I were a child to answer that question, yes umm yes I have and my father bought me this bike to experience and to learn umm a new.

✓ Thank you, ma'am, for that wonderful question. To answer whether I had a bike when I was a child: yes, I did. My father bought me that bike so I could gain experience and learn something new.

This sentence has multiple structure and tense problems (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 6). 'When I were a child' is incorrect; the past tense singular uses 'was' (presented as a present/past tense issue, ID 6). The original combines several clauses without proper punctuation and uses awkward phrasing ('sharing with you if I have a bike' and 'to experience and to learn umm a new'). Correction separates ideas into clear sentences, uses past tense 'had'/'was' and 'did', replaces 'this bike' with 'that bike' for past reference, and changes 'to experience and to learn a new' to 'so I could gain experience and learn something new.' Suggestion: break long utterances into shorter sentences, ensure subject-verb tense agreement (use 'was' for singular past), and use clear purpose constructions like 'so I could...' or 'in order to...'.

× I must say that yes, bike is Bikes are popular in the Philippines because riding a bike allows you to access to experience the fresh breeze and also 2.

✓ I must say that yes, bikes are popular in the Philippines because riding a bike allows you to experience the fresh breeze.

The sentence shows subject-verb agreement and article/word choice errors (Grammar Problem Type ID 27 and 22). The original repeats and misorders 'bike is Bikes'; the correct plural subject is 'bikes' with the plural verb 'are'. The phrase 'allows you to access to experience' is redundant and incorrect; use 'allows you to experience'. The trailing 'and also 2.' is incomplete and likely a filler; it should be removed. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb match in number ('bikes are'), avoid redundant prepositions ('to access to experience' -> 'to experience'), and remove unfinished fragments.