Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, grammatically correct and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question (e.g. “Yes, I did.”), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verb forms and word choices (e.g. “I used to ride a bike” not “practice rider bike”), and avoid redundant phrases like “now I became lady ride a bike.” Aim for 2–4 sentences, use simple past for childhood habits and present perfect/simple present for current abilities.

例: Yes, I did. I used to ride a bike almost every day when I was a child, mainly around my neighborhood. As a result, I’m still comfortable riding now and often cycle short distances to run errands.

提案: Give a direct answer first (e.g. “Yes, they are quite popular.”), then explain with specific details and linking words. Avoid filler words like “Ah no. Ah yes.” Use clearer phrasing: explain differences between urban and rural popularity, reasons (cost, convenience) and a brief example. Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in rural areas like where I live. Because they are affordable and practical on narrow roads, many people use them for daily tasks such as going to the market or visiting neighbors.

× Girl, I had a bike, I often practice rider bike and now I became lady ride a bike where I think I'm good at riding a bike.

✓ I had a bike. I often practiced riding it, and now I am a woman who rides a bike; I think I'm good at riding.

The sentence contains several tense and verb form errors. 'Often practice rider bike' is incorrect: the past habit requires past tense 'practiced' and the verb should be 'ride' in gerund form 'riding' after 'practiced'. 'Now I became lady ride a bike' mixes past and present; use present 'I am a woman who rides a bike' or 'now I ride a bike' to show current state. Also the original lacked clear sentence boundaries; split into sentences and use correct verb forms to match past habit and present state. Suggestion: Use 'practiced riding' for past repeated action and 'I am' or 'I now ride' for present state. Applicable grammar problem type ID:5

× Ah no. Ah yes, but the rural ones which I live in.

✓ Ah, yes. Bikes are popular in the rural area where I live.

The phrase 'the rural ones which I live in' is ungrammatical: 'ones' is a vague pronoun and 'which I live in' is a nonrestrictive clause requiring 'where' or 'which' with proper structure. Better is 'the rural area where I live' or 'the rural areas where I live'. Also punctuation and hesitation 'Ah no. Ah yes' should be clarified; context suggests agreement so 'Ah, yes' is appropriate. Suggestion: Use 'the rural area where I live' to specify location and avoid vague pronouns. Applicable grammar problem type ID:12