Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure, be concise, and add one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give a brief supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundancy (e.g., “have a bike before” and “when I was young” together).

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. It was my main way of getting around the neighborhood, and I often rode it with friends after school, which helped me stay active and make friends.

提案: Use clearer grammar and more precise vocabulary; give a specific reason and an example. Begin with a direct opinion, then explain with two linked reasons using linking words (e.g., “because” and “for example”). Correct awkward phrases like “no need to gas” and “in your basically.”

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient and economical. For example, many people use bicycles for short commutes since they don’t require fuel and also provide a good form of exercise.

× Well absolutely yes. When I was young I have a bike before because it's too convenient on the street and my friends were traveling with bike.

✓ Well, absolutely yes. When I was young I had a bike because it was very convenient on the street and my friends rode bikes.

This sentence mixes past context with a present-tense verb 'have' and uses incorrect verb forms 'traveling with bike' and awkward phrasing. Use past tense 'had' to match 'When I was young'. Change 'it's too convenient' to 'it was very convenient' for past-time consistency. Replace 'my friends were traveling with bike' with 'my friends rode bikes' for correct past-tense verb and natural phrasing. Suggestion: keep all verbs in the past when describing past situations and use plural 'bikes' when referring to multiple friends. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because it's too convenient and no need to gas and more exercise in your basically.

✓ Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are convenient, do not require gas, and provide more exercise.

The original sentence uses 'it's' (it is) to refer to plural 'bikes' and the phrase 'no need to gas' is ungrammatical. Also 'in your basically' is incorrect pronoun and word choice. Replace 'it's' with 'they are' to match plural subject. Use 'do not require gas' for correct negative construction and 'provide more exercise' for clear meaning. Remove 'in your basically' which is unnecessary. Suggestion: ensure pronouns agree in number with their nouns and use clear verbs for actions or states. Grammar problem type ID: 12