Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct at start, use past tense consistently, avoid idioms that may sound informal or unclear, and add one clear supporting detail with a linking word. Keep it under five sentences. For example, begin with a simple topic sentence about having a bike as a child, then briefly describe who taught you and one memory or reason why you enjoyed it.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My cousin taught me to ride it, and I practised with my friends every afternoon until I felt confident. As a result, riding became my favourite way to spend time outdoors.

提案: Answer directly, use clearer phrasing and one specific reason or example. Avoid vague phrases like “ride on their vehicles.” Use linking words (for example, because/for instance/therefore) and provide a concrete detail such as where or for what trips people use bikes.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people use them for short commutes to work and school. For instance, in cities with heavy traffic, cycling is faster and cheaper than driving, so many commuters prefer bikes.

× Well, I do own a bike.

✓ Well, I owned a bike.

The examiner's question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. Using 'do own' is present tense and mismatches the time frame. Suggestion: use simple past 'owned' to match the question context.

× When I was a knee high to grasshopper I used to ride the bike with my cousins and friends.

✓ When I was knee-high to a grasshopper, I used to ride the bike with my cousins and friends.

The idiom is 'knee-high to a grasshopper' and needs the correct form and article 'a'. Also include commas for clarity. This is mainly a sentence structure/idiom error; correct the fixed phrase and punctuation. Suggestion: use the standard idiom and insert commas.

× Mainly my cousin told me how to ride a bike.

✓ Mainly, my cousin taught me how to ride a bike.

The original 'told me how to ride a bike' is understandable but 'taught me' is the correct verb when referring to instructing a skill. Also add a comma after 'Mainly' for clarity. This corrects word choice and improves prepositional/verb usage. Suggestion: use 'taught' for learning skills.

× Definitely, bikes are really common in my country because people tend to ride on their vehicles or bikes to go to their respective jobs.

✓ Definitely, bikes are very common in my country because people tend to ride motorbikes or bikes to get to their jobs.

Use 'very' instead of 'really' for a more natural collocation with 'common'. 'Ride on their vehicles' is incorrect; use 'ride motorbikes' or 'ride bikes'. 'To go to their respective jobs' is wordy—'to get to their jobs' is concise and natural. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations ('very common') and clearer verbs ('get to') and specific vehicle terms ('motorbikes').