Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating phrases like “used to” three times and correct tense/word order. Also vary vocabulary (e.g. “ride” instead of repeating “bike”) and include a short reason or memory to make the answer more engaging.

例: Yes, I did. I often rode a small red bike around my neighborhood with my brother and father. For example, we would race to the park on weekends, which I always found exciting because I loved the feeling of speed and freedom.

提案: The student repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. Provide a clear direct response (yes/no or short opinion), then add one or two specific reasons or examples using linking words. Keep it to up to 5 sentences and use varied vocabulary (e.g., “cycling,” “commute,” “recreation”).

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially in cities for commuting. For instance, many people use electric bikes for short trips because they are cheaper and avoid traffic, while others ride for exercise and leisure on weekends.

× I used to bike when I was a child and I used to bike with my brother and my dad and used to be so fun.

✓ I used to ride a bike when I was a child, and I used to ride with my brother and my dad; it used to be so much fun.

The sentence has several issues: 'bike' is used as a verb but 'ride a bike' is more natural (use noun phrase or 'ride'). The final clause 'used to be so fun' is ungrammatical because 'fun' describes something as enjoyable; we need a subject ('it') and the structure 'used to be' plus noun/adjective. Also repetition of 'used to' is acceptable but sounds repetitive; keep for clarity. Suggestion: use 'ride a bike' and add subject 'it' before 'used to be', and add 'much' for natural emphasis.

× Do you think bikes are popular in your country?

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in my country.

The student repeated the examiner's question instead of answering. This is a communication/structure error: a response should address the question. Provide a direct answer in the appropriate tense ('are' for general present). Suggestion: answer briefly and then expand with reasons or examples.