Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 문법과 시제 사용이 정확하지 않고 문장이 반복적이며 의미 전달이 불분명합니다. 먼저 시제 일치를 위해 과거형을 사용하세요(예: "I had a bike"). 주제문을 명확히 하고 이유를 1–2개의 간결한 문장으로 설명하세요. 불필요한 반복을 피하고 비교나 감정을 표현할 때 적절한 어휘(예: "faster than walking", "felt free")를 사용하세요. 문장 연결에는 간단한 접속사(so, because, and)를 사용해 논리적으로 이어가세요.

例: I had a bicycle when I was a child. It was white and I loved it because it was faster than walking and made me feel free. I used it to go to my friends' houses and explore the neighborhood on weekends.

提案: 문장 구조와 어순이 어색하고 문법 오류가 많습니다. 직접적으로 질문에 답하는 주제문으로 시작하세요 (예: "Yes, I think so."). 그 다음에 구체적인 이유를 1–2문장으로 제시하되 연결어(because, for example, especially)를 사용하세요. ‘사람들’ 같은 일반 명사를 사용할 때는 올바른 관사와 수를 확인하고 시제와 동사 일치를 맞추세요.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many people ride bikes to stay healthy and some use them for short trips on weekends because it's cheap and convenient.

× Yes, I have.

✓ Yes, I did.

The question asks about possession in the past ('Did you have a bike when you were a child?'), so the student should use past tense. Saying 'I have' is present tense and does not match the past-time reference. Use 'I did' to indicate past possession. Suggestion: respond with past tense verbs when the question refers to the past (e.g., 'Yes, I did' or 'Yes, I had a bike').

× I like a white car especially I like bicycle because it is it would faster than working and I feel it, I feel.

✓ I liked a white bicycle; I especially liked bicycles because they were faster than walking and I enjoyed it.

Multiple issues: tense should be past to match childhood context, article and noun choice ('a white car' mismatches 'bicycle'), subject-verb agreement and comparative form ('faster than walking' not 'working'), and redundant/unclear phrases ('I feel it, I feel'). Follow coherent sentence structure: use past tense verbs, correct articles, plural for general statements about bicycles, and the comparative 'faster than walking'. Suggestion: break into clearer clauses and keep tense consistent (past).

× Is our country people like a bicycle, especially people need to healthy and they always rode a bicycle in weekend some people.

✓ In our country, people like bicycles; especially, people want to be healthy, and some people always ride bicycles on weekends.

Problems include incorrect question form ('Is our country people' should be declarative), wrong article and number ('a bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' when speaking generally), adjective use ('need to healthy' should be 'want to be healthy' or 'need to be healthy'), tense consistency ('rode' should be 'ride' for habitual present), and word order ('in weekend' should be 'on weekends'). Also pronoun/subject placement and quantifier 'some people' should be placed appropriately. Suggestion: use present simple for habitual actions, plural nouns for general statements, and correct prepositions for time expressions (on weekends).