Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and grammatically correct, start with a clear topic sentence, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct errors (e.g. 'when I was a child', 'I used it easily' or better 'I rode it everywhere'). Avoid repetition like 'I used it' twice.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was bright red and my parents bought it for my seventh birthday, so I felt very proud. Because it was lightweight, I rode it everywhere in the neighborhood after school and on weekends.

提案: Give a direct answer, then support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words. Expand slightly (2–3 sentences) to show ability to explain and use varied vocabulary.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. For example, many people use them for short commutes and errands because they are cheap and convenient. As a result, cities often have bike lanes and bike-sharing schemes to accommodate cyclists.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Missing the article 'a' before 'child' causes an ungrammatical noun phrase. The correct expression is 'a child' to indicate a nonspecific singular countable noun. Suggestion: include the indefinite article 'a' when referring to 'a child'.

× I used it easy.

✓ I used it easily.

The verb 'used' requires an adverb to modify how the action was performed. 'Easy' is an adjective and cannot properly modify a verb; the adverb form 'easily' should be used. Suggestion: change adjectives modifying verbs into their adverb forms (often adding -ly).

× I used it to ride.

✓ I used it for riding.

The phrase 'used it to ride' is awkward and not the natural collocation in English. 'Use something for (doing) something' or the gerund form 'for riding' is more natural. Alternatively, 'I rode it' is concise. Suggestion: prefer 'I used it for riding' or 'I rode it' to express purpose or habitual action.

× Yes, the bikes are really popular in our country.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in our country.

Using the definite article 'the' before a plural noun here implies a specific set of bikes previously mentioned, which is not intended. When speaking generally about all bikes, omit the article: 'Bikes are really popular.' Suggestion: drop 'the' when making general statements about a whole class of things.