Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer direct and clear with correct grammar, avoid contradictions and unnecessary repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No + brief detail), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct verbs and vocabulary (e.g., 'ride' not 'write') and remove vague phrases.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle when I was a child. However, I couldn’t ride it well at first, so I didn’t use it often. Eventually, after several lessons from my older brother, I learned to balance and began riding to school every day.

提案: Give a clear overall opinion then explain reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and filler phrases like 'I guess.' Use accurate prepositions and collocations (e.g., 'in urban areas', 'preferred method of commuting'). Provide one specific example or statistic if possible.

例: I think it depends on the area. In urban areas, bikes are less popular because people rely on buses and cars for commuting; for example, many main roads and long distances discourage cycling. By contrast, in rural areas bicycles remain common since routes are shorter and traffic is lighter.

× I used to have one when I was a child, but it wasn't.

✓ I used to have one when I was a child, but I don't anymore.

The original fragment 'but it wasn't' is incomplete and uses 'wasn't' (past tense of to be) incorrectly to mean 'no longer have.' This is a sentence structure error and misuse of verb form. Replace with 'I don't anymore' to correctly express present lack of possession after a past habit. Use the present simple negative to show current state. Suggestion: Use clear contrasts like 'I used to... but I don't anymore' when comparing past habits with the present.

× I wasn't able to write it that much because I did not know how to ride a bicycle at the time.

✓ I wasn't able to ride it much because I did not know how to ride a bicycle at the time.

The error: 'write it' is a wrong verb; context requires 'ride.' This is a lexical choice mistake and affects meaning. Also 'that much' is informal but acceptable; 'ride it much' matches the intended past inability. Keep past tense 'wasn't' and 'did not know' for consistency. Suggestion: Use the verb that matches the action (ride for bicycle) and maintain past tense for past ability or lack of knowledge.

× At first I tried to get on the bicycle.

✓ At first I tried to get on the bicycle and then I learned to ride it.

Original sentence 'At first I tried to get on the bicycle.' is grammatically correct but incomplete for coherence. The tense 'tried' is correct for a past attempt. I provide an extended correction to better complete the thought and keep past tense consistency. Suggestion: When recounting past events, keep verbs in past tense and add outcome for clarity.

× For on the urban areas bikes are not popular because buses are more preferred method of commuting.

✓ In urban areas bikes are not popular because buses are the more preferred method of commuting.

Errors: extraneous preposition 'for', wrong preposition 'on' and missing article before 'more preferred method.' Use 'in urban areas' (correct preposition) and include 'the' before 'more preferred method' to specify a single method. Also 'more preferred' is redundant—better 'the preferred method' or 'a more popular method.' Suggestion: Use 'in' with regions and include definite article when indicating a specific preferred method: 'buses are the preferred method of commuting.'

× But in rural areas bikes are still relatively popular I guess.

✓ But in rural areas, bikes are still relatively popular, I guess.

This sentence needs commas to separate the main clause and the tag 'I guess.' The sentence structure is otherwise acceptable; adding commas improves readability and marks the speaker's uncertainty. Maintain present tense 'are' to describe current general truth. Suggestion: Use commas around conversational tags like 'I guess' or 'I think' to improve clarity.