Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with accuracy of verbs and avoid filler words. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific details using correct verb forms and linking words. Replace hesitations like “uh” and incorrect verbs such as “raise” with correct verbs (e.g., “bring” or “take”). Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle and I rode it around my neighborhood every afternoon after school. I often took my friend to the park, which we both enjoyed because we could race and play there.

提案: Fix grammar (subject-verb agreement) and redundant or incorrect phrasing. Begin with a direct topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “for example”, “also”). Use appropriate collocations like “for recreation” or “for exercise.” Keep answers natural and avoid repeating the same word.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country. Many people use them to commute to work or university, and they also cycle for recreation and exercise. For example, you can often see students and office workers riding along main roads and bike paths.

× I often, uh, raise my friend to the park, which was always so much fun.

✓ I often, uh, take my friend to the park, which was always so much fun.

The verb 'raise' is incorrect in this context. 'Raise' means to lift or to bring up (e.g., raise a child). When describing bringing someone to a place, use 'take' + object. Also, 'take' fits the past habit context in the sentence. Suggestion: use verbs that match the meaning of movement to a place, such as 'take' or 'bring'.

× Yes, bicycle are quite popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country.

The subject 'bicycle' is singular but the verb 'are' is plural; the correct form is the plural noun 'bicycles' to agree with 'are'. Use plural nouns when making a general statement about many items. Suggestion: use 'bicycles' or rephrase 'A bicycle is quite popular' depending on intended meaning.

× Many people use them to commute to work or university and also for recreate recreational exercise.

✓ Many people use them to commute to work or university and also for recreational exercise.

The phrase 'recreate recreational exercise' is incorrect and redundant. 'Recreate' is a verb meaning to relax or have fun; 'recreational' is the correct adjective to describe 'exercise'. Remove 'recreate' to avoid redundancy and use the adjective 'recreational'. Suggestion: say 'for recreational exercise' or simply 'for recreation'.