Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail. Avoid filler words like "like." Use correct tense and natural phrasing (e.g., "I didn't" rather than "No I did not").

例: I didn't have a bike as a child. I only got one when I was 16 because my family lived far from school, so my parents thought it would help me get around.

提案: Answer directly, then give one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid repetition ("prefer to use prefer to"); correct grammar ("It is" not "As"). Use specific examples if possible.

例: Not really. Most people prefer to drive cars because public transport and cycling infrastructure are limited, so driving is easier and more convenient for daily travel.

× No I did not. I only got a bike when I was like 16 years old.

✓ No, I didn't. I only got a bike when I was about 16 years old.

The sentence uses past simple correctly but needs punctuation and a more natural adverb. Add a comma after 'No' and contract 'did not' to 'didn't' for spoken style. Replace 'like' with 'about' because 'like' is informal and can be unclear in this context; 'about' indicates an approximate age more appropriately.

× No, I don't. It's because in my opinion, most people in my country prefer to use prefer to drive a car as their transportation.

✓ No, I don't. In my opinion, most people in my country prefer to drive a car for transportation.

There is a repetition error ('prefer to use prefer to') and awkward phrasing. Remove the duplicate 'prefer to' and use the present simple 'prefer' for general truth. Use 'for transportation' instead of 'as their transportation' which is wordier and less natural.

× As is easier and more convenient.

✓ It is easier and more convenient.

This fragment lacks a clear subject and auxiliary structure. Begin with the pronoun 'It' to form a complete sentence: 'It is easier and more convenient.' This ties the sentence to the previous statement and provides correct subject-verb structure.