Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be grammatically correct, concise, and logical. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “No, I didn’t have my own bike as a child.”). Then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g. “However” or “but”), explaining why you borrowed bikes and what you enjoyed. Avoid unclear phrases like “on my payments” and keep the answer to 2–3 sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have my own bike as a child. Instead, I often borrowed bikes from neighbors or friends because my family couldn’t afford one, but I still enjoyed riding them a lot because I loved the sense of adventure and freedom.

提案: Give a clear direct answer then add specific supporting reasons with linking words. Use correct tense and clearer phrasing (e.g. “yes” or “no” and why). Mention concrete observations or facts (e.g. many people use bikes for commuting, markets, or in rural areas) to make your point stronger.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, I have seen many people riding bikes for short commutes and errands since I was a child, and they remain common today because bikes are cheap and convenient in crowded urban areas.

× I don't have a bike when I was a child, I only borrowed on my payments, but I enjoy during this time 'cause I like adventures.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child; I only borrowed one sometimes, but I enjoyed that time because I liked adventures.

Tense consistency error: 'don't have' is present tense but context is past ('when I was a child'), so use past tense 'didn't have'. 'Borrowed on my payments' is incorrect phrasing and likely means 'borrowed one sometimes' or 'borrowed from my parents' — correct to 'borrowed one sometimes'. 'Enjoy' should be past 'enjoyed' to match past timeframe, and 'cause' is informal; use 'because'. Also 'I like adventures' should be past 'I liked adventures' to maintain tense consistency. Suggestion: keep all verbs in past when describing past situations and use clear expressions for frequency ('sometimes', 'often').

× I think bikes are popular in my country since I always saw one when I go out, since when I was a child and today.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because I have always seen them when I go out, both when I was a child and today.

Mixed tenses and incorrect time expression: 'I always saw one when I go out' mixes past 'saw' with present 'go', causing inconsistency. Use present perfect 'have always seen' to link past to present. Use plural 'them' to refer to bikes (singular 'one' is odd in general statement). Replace 'since' with 'because' to introduce a reason; use 'both when I was a child and today' for clarity. Suggestion: use present perfect to describe repeated experiences over time and match pronouns/number with the noun.