Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Good direct answer and relevant details. To improve, make the response more concise, use a clear topic sentence, and add one specific vivid detail (e.g., how often or a memorable moment). Use a linking word when adding the supporting detail to make it coherent. Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

例: Yes, I had a purple bike when I was a child. I often rode it to the nearby park to visit my friends, and we would play there every Saturday morning. For example, once I raced my neighbour to the big oak tree and won.

提案: The main idea is understandable but the sentence has grammar and clarity issues. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use 'in Indonesia' and 'are uncommon' or 'not common'), and give a specific reason or brief example. Use a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'however') to connect ideas and avoid contradictions like saying 'not really popular' then 'not uncommon'.

例: In Indonesia, bicycles are not very popular. This is mainly because there are few dedicated bike lanes, so riding on busy roads feels unsafe. As a result, many people prefer motorbikes or cars for daily travel.

× An Indonesia bikes is not really popular because we don't have a specific lane for bikes, so it is not uncommon to use bikes in here.

✓ Bikes in Indonesia are not really popular because we don't have a specific bike lane, so it is not common to use bikes here.

The original sentence has multiple errors fitting the 'Singular and plural issue' type: 'An Indonesia bikes' mixes singular article and plural noun and misorders words; it should be 'Bikes in Indonesia' or 'A bike in Indonesia'. Also 'is not really popular' should agree with the plural subject 'Bikes', so use 'are not really popular'. Additionally, 'in here' is nonstandard; use 'here'. I corrected 'specific lane for bikes' to the more natural 'specific bike lane'. Suggestion: identify singular vs plural subjects and ensure the verb and articles match (use 'a/an' with singular countable nouns, no article with plural pluralized nouns), and place modifiers (country) after the noun or use 'in [country]'.