Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and fluent. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, avoid filler words (uh, um), and add one or two specific supporting details (when you stopped having one or why). Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences and use linking words like 'but' or 'because' if needed.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents preferred I walk to school or use public transport because our neighborhood was hilly and not very safe for cycling. However, I learned to ride one in my late teens when I lived near a park.

提案: Give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Avoid repeating words and mispronunciations (e.g., 'bags' should be 'bikes'). Use linking words such as 'because' or 'however' to connect ideas. Keep responses concise (2–3 sentences) and focus on relevant vocabulary like 'cars', 'bicycles', 'commuting', 'urban areas'.

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country; most people prefer cars for commuting. This is because public roads and long distances make driving more convenient, although I sometimes see people cycling in parks or city centers for exercise.

× Uh, I think, uh, I didn't.

✓ Uh, I don't think so.

The student used a past tense negative 'I didn't' incorrectly in response to 'Did you have a bike when you were a child?'. The natural reply is either 'No, I didn't' (simple past negative) or 'I don't think so' if uncertain. Given the hesitation 'I think', the correct form is present-tense 'I don't think so' to express uncertainty about a past fact. Suggestion: replace 'I think, I didn't' with 'I don't think so' or simply 'No, I didn't.'

× Honestly, uh, we deal with, uh, we deal with, uh, we deal with the ride a car, not uh, bags, but sometime I see uh, someone, uh, ride, uh, a bag.

✓ Honestly, we usually drive cars, not bikes, but sometimes I see someone riding a bike.

Multiple issues: 'we deal with' is incorrect collocation for habitual action; use 'we usually drive' to describe common behavior. 'the ride a car' is ungrammatical—use 'drive cars' (plural) for general statements. 'not uh, bags' is likely intended to be 'bikes'; using 'bags' is a word choice error. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes' (adverb of frequency). 'ride a bag' should be 'ride a bike' and needs present participle 'riding' to describe what someone is doing. Also use plural 'cars' for general reference. Suggestion: use 'we usually drive cars' for habitual action and 'sometimes I see someone riding a bike' for occasional observation.