Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and consistent: avoid saying you did not have a bike then immediately saying you had a bicycle (they are the same thing). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using a linking word. Keep it natural and under five sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was very young. Instead, I had a small bicycle from about age eight, and I loved riding it around the neighborhood because it gave me independence and helped me make friends.

提案: Avoid overly negative or biased language; be specific and balanced. Start with a clear opinion, then give one or two concrete reasons or examples using linking words (for example, because, so, however). Use neutral vocabulary (e.g., less common, not widely used) rather than phrases like "looked down upon."

例: Not really — cars are the preferred mode of transport in my country. For example, the public infrastructure and long commuting distances make driving more practical, so bicycles tend to be less common and mostly used for short trips or by delivery workers.

× Well, no, I did not have a bike when I was a child. I had a bicycle and I loved riding it.

✓ Well, no, I did not have a bike when I was a child; I had a bicycle and I loved riding it.

'I did not have a bike when I was a child. I had a bicycle and I loved riding it.' is grammatically acceptable but the two independent clauses are closely related and are better connected with a semicolon or conjunction for smoother flow. Suggestion: join related independent clauses with a semicolon or use 'but' or 'however' to show contrast. This is a sentence structure improvement, not a tense or agreement correction.

× Unfortunately, no they're not. In my country, the medium of transportation is car by preference. Bicycles are mostly looked down upon in a very condescending behavior because they are used by only the lower classes.

✓ Unfortunately, no, they are not. In my country, the preferred medium of transportation is the car. Bicycles are mostly looked down upon in a very condescending way because they are used only by the lower classes.

Multiple issues: 'no they're not' should be 'no, they are not' for punctuation and formality. 'the medium of transportation is car by preference' is incorrect article use and awkward phrasing; correct is 'the preferred medium of transportation is the car' (use definite article with 'car' as a category and 'preferred' as adjective). 'in a very condescending behavior' is unnatural; the correct collocation is 'in a very condescending way' or 'with condescension'. 'used by only the lower classes' should be 'used only by the lower classes' (move 'only' before the phrase it modifies). These corrections follow the listed grammar problem types 17 (definite article), 26 (sentence structure), and 13 (incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs) as well as adverb placement rules.