Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Mejora la claridad y la estructura. Evita errores léxicos (por ejemplo "write a book" en lugar de "ride a bike") y frases confusas como "go biking suddenly". Comienza con una frase directa que responda a la pregunta, añade uno o dos detalles concretos (edad, quién te enseñó, con qué frecuencia montabas) y usa conectores simples (for example, since then). Mantén el total en máximo 4-5 oraciones.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My father taught me to ride it when I was nine, and after that I rode it almost every day to visit friends or go to the park. Riding helped me feel independent and it was my favourite way to get around.

提案: Haz la respuesta más directa y concreta. Evita expresiones vagas como "to be aware of the nature"; usa frases claras como "to enjoy nature". Empieza con una opinión clara, luego añade dos detalles específicos (por ejemplo: who uses bikes, typical reasons, an example of infrastructure). Usa conectores como "because" o "for example" para mayor coherencia.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular where I live because our town is small and distances are short. Many people cycle to school or work, and there are several parks and bike paths, so cycling is both practical and pleasant.

× When I was a child, I used to write a book, a bike, very commonly.

✓ When I was a child, I used to ride a bike very often.

The original sentence uses incorrect verbs and word order. 'Used to write a book, a bike' mixes unrelated actions and is ungrammatical. Replace with 'used to ride a bike' to express a habitual past action (correct use of 'used to' + base verb) and use 'very often' or 'frequently' for frequency. Suggestion: keep 'used to' + base verb and place frequency adverb after verb phrase. Grammar problem type ID:26

× My dad taught me how to ride a bike when I was nine years old, and since then I used to go biking suddenly.

✓ My dad taught me how to ride a bike when I was nine years old, and since then I have often gone biking.

'Since then' requires the present perfect to show an action continuing from the past to now: 'have gone biking'. 'Used to' indicates a past habit that no longer happens and conflicts with 'since then'. 'Suddenly' is incorrect here; use 'often' or 'regularly' to describe frequency. Suggestion: use present perfect with frequency adverb after 'have' + past participle. Grammar problem type ID:6

× Since I live in a small town, bikes are commonly used among the population to be aware of the nature or to go to school or work.

✓ Since I live in a small town, bikes are commonly used by people to enjoy nature or to go to school or work.

'Among the population' is wordy and awkward; use 'by people'. 'To be aware of the nature' is incorrect collocation; use 'to enjoy nature' or 'to appreciate nature'. Also 'bikes are commonly used by people' is passive but acceptable. Suggestion: prefer natural collocations like 'enjoy nature' and simpler agents like 'people'. Grammar problem type ID:11

× We also have a lot of parks where you can appreciate the nature and do sports comfortably.

✓ We also have a lot of parks where you can appreciate nature and do sports comfortably.

Do not use the definite article 'the' before uncountable noun 'nature' in this context; say 'appreciate nature'. The rest of the sentence is fine; 'do sports comfortably' is acceptable though 'exercise comfortably' is more natural. Suggestion: remove unnecessary article and consider alternate verbs like 'enjoy' or 'exercise'. Grammar problem type ID:17