Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan tata bahasa dasar. Jawaban saat ini membingungkan karena penggunaan tense yang salah, pengulangan kata, dan urutan kata yang kacau. Untuk meningkatkan: (1) Gunakan past tense konsisten saat membicarakan masa lalu (I had, I was); (2) Mulai dengan kalimat topik yang jelas; (3) Tambahkan 1–2 detail pendukung yang spesifik dan gunakan kata hubung sederhana (but, because) untuk koneksi; (4) Batasi panjang jawaban maksimal 3–4 kalimat dan hindari pengulangan.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. At first I was too scared to ride it, so I was the last in my group to learn. But after a few weeks of practice with my older brother, I became confident and started riding every day because it felt free and fun.

提案: Perbaiki kesepakatan subjek-kata kerja, kejelasan dan spesifiknya contoh. Jawaban saat ini mengulang kata dan menggunakan struktur kalimat yang tidak jelas. Untuk memperbaiki: (1) Gunakan bentuk kata kerja yang benar (bikes are); (2) Berikan bukti spesifik atau alasan (mis. sekolah, jalur sepeda, budaya rekreasi); (3) Gunakan satu atau dua kalimat pendukung yang jelas dengan penghubung sederhana (because, for example); (4) Hindari filler seperti "uh" dan pengulangan kata.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country. Many children and adults ride bikes for short trips and exercise because there are safe bike lanes in many neighborhoods. For example, I often see families cycling together in the park on weekends.

× Yes, I have and I really like to drive them, but before but me actually I the last person to can't drive drive them.

✓ Yes, I had one and I really liked riding it, but at first I was actually the last person who could not ride a bike.

Sentence contains multiple pronoun and reference errors: 'have' should be past 'had' to match 'when you were a child'; 'them' incorrectly refers to 'bike' (singular) so use 'it'; 'drive' is wrong verb for bikes — use 'ride'; word order and auxiliary errors 'me actually I the last person to can't' are ungrammatical. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense, use correct pronouns ('one'/'it') for singular, use 'ride' for bicycles, and use a clear relative clause 'the last person who could not ride a bike' to express inability in the past.

× So actually when I was kid I was really scary to bike to drive a bike.

✓ So actually when I was a kid I was really scared to ride a bike.

Errors: missing article 'a' before 'kid'; 'scary' (adjective meaning causing fear) is wrong; use 'scared' (feeling fear). 'to bike to drive a bike' is redundant and uses wrong verb 'drive' for bicycles — use 'ride'. Suggestion: use 'a kid', 'scared', and 'ride a bike' to form a correct past tense sentence.

× Yes, bikes is really popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are really popular in my country.

Subject 'bikes' is plural, so verb must be plural 'are' not 'is'. Suggestion: ensure subject and verb agree in number: plural subject takes plural verb.

× I think like every kid, every kids in my city actually, uh, in my home they are all of them ride bike and it's so 'cause it's, I think it's so much fun to, to, to see and to try.

✓ I think every child, every kid in my city, and everyone in my neighborhood all ride bikes, and it's because I think it's so much fun to watch and to try.

Several number and word-choice errors: mixing 'every kid' with 'every kids' — 'every' requires singular noun, use 'every child' or 'every kid'. 'In my home' likely meant 'in my neighborhood' or 'at home'; 'they are all of them ride bike' is ungrammatical — use 'all ride bikes'. 'ride bike' needs plural or article: 'ride bikes' or 'ride a bike'. Also unclear 'it's so 'cause it's' — rephrase to 'and it's because'. Suggestion: use consistent singular/plural forms, choose appropriate nouns ('child'/'kid', 'neighborhood'), and correct verb forms 'ride bikes'; simplify phrase to 'it's so much fun to watch and to try'.