Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer the question directly with a clear statement about your own experience. Keep it concise (no more than 5 sentences), use natural phrasing, and avoid repeating the examiner's words. If you add details, use linking words and specific information (e.g., when, where, who with).

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I got it when I was seven and learned to ride it near my grandparents’ house. Because we lived in a small town, I rode it to school and to visit friends almost every day. Overall, it was my main way to get around until I started using public transport.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence answering the question, then give 1–2 specific reasons using clear linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid hesitations, unclear labels like 'third world country', and vague phrases such as 'fuelage'. Use more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'fuel', 'public transport', 'cost'). Keep answers within five sentences and include a brief example or consequence to support your point.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because many people cannot afford cars and fuel costs are high. As a result, bicycles are a cheap and convenient way to travel short distances. For instance, many market vendors use bikes to transport goods to local markets every morning.

× Did you have a bike when you were a child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

This sentence is a repetition of the examiner's question but grammatically correct. No change needed. Keep as is.

× Bikes are really popular in my country, primarily because it's a third world country and people usually do not, uh, people are not able actually to afford a lot of cars and to afford the fuelage.

✓ Bikes are really popular in my country, primarily because it is a developing country and many people cannot afford cars or fuel.

Problems: 'it's a third world country' is outdated and informal; 'people usually do not, uh, people are not able actually' is redundant and disfluent; 'afford the fuelage' is incorrect word choice ('fuelage' is not standard). Corrections: use 'developing country' for politeness and accuracy; remove redundancy and filler words; use 'cannot afford cars or fuel' for clear and grammatical expression. This fixes article/word-choice and sentence structure issues (IDs 22, 26, 11). Suggestions: avoid fillers, combine clauses smoothly, choose standard vocabulary ('fuel' not 'fuelage').

× So it's better to uh, run on the bike and to shop rather than going on in a car, which is uh.

✓ So it is better to ride a bike to shop than to drive a car.

Problems: 'run on the bike' is wrong verb choice; 'going on in a car' is awkward and ungrammatical; fillers ('uh') interrupt fluency. Corrections: use 'ride a bike' and 'drive a car'; express purpose with 'to shop' and compare with 'than to drive a car'. This addresses incorrect verb usage and preposition/structure issues (IDs 8, 11, 26). Suggestions: choose correct verbs for activities (ride/drive), omit fillers, and use parallel structure for comparison.