Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be a bit more specific and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two concrete reasons or a short example. Avoid absolute negatives unless you mean them. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so'.

例: I usually prefer casual clothes like jeans, shorts, jackets and jumpers because they are comfortable and versatile. For example, I often wear a jacket over a T-shirt when I go out with friends.

提案: Clarify vocabulary and correct errors. Begin with a direct statement, then give clear reasons with linking words. Replace unclear phrase 'rice clothes' with the intended word (probably 'rigid' or 'formal').

例: I always choose comfortable, casual clothes because they feel soft against the skin and allow me to move freely. I don't enjoy rigid or formal outfits since they feel restrictive.

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Use a topic sentence and one brief reason or example. Avoid awkward phrases like 'I never forget to put my T-shirt on'—say when or why you wear them.

例: Yes, I really like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to layer. For instance, I often wear a T-shirt under a hoodie when I hang out with friends.

提案: Correct mistakes and make the response concise. Start with a direct answer, then give a brief, specific example and use linking words like 'for example' or 'so'. Avoid filler words like 'OK'.

例: Yes, I usually spend quite a lot of time choosing clothes. For example, when I visit a mall I often spend an hour or two picking out a jacket, jumper or T-shirt to make sure it fits well.

提案: Be more specific and natural: give one clear contrast with reasons. Use linking words like 'whereas' or 'while' and avoid vague phrases like 'relatively unique in colour'.

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear plain, smart casual T-shirts in neutral colours for class or work, whereas on weekends I prefer informal T-shirts with bold prints or graffiti because they feel more relaxed.

提案: Fix grammar and clarity. Give a direct answer, two clear reasons, and avoid unclear adjectives like 'majestic' unless explained. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so'.

例: I prefer black and blue clothes because they hide dirt well and look neat. Black also feels elegant, while blue is versatile for casual outfits.

× I like clothes which are smooth and comfortable to skin.

✓ I like clothes which are smooth and comfortable to the skin.

The phrase 'comfortable to skin' omits the article 'the' before 'skin' and is an incorrect collocation. Use 'comfortable to the skin' to indicate what the clothes feel like. Alternatively say 'comfortable on the skin.'

× I do not like rice clothes.

✓ I do not like coarse clothes.

'Rice clothes' is not a correct phrase in English. The student likely meant 'coarse' or 'rough' to describe fabric texture. Use an appropriate adjective such as 'coarse,' 'rough,' or 'stiff.'

× Yes, I like T-shirt a lot.

✓ Yes, I like T-shirts a lot.

When speaking generally, use the plural 'T-shirts' or use the article with the singular ('a T-shirt'). 'T-shirt' without an article is incorrect here.

× I never forget to put my T-shirt on, even if it's beneath other clothes.

✓ I never forget to put my T-shirt on, even if it is under other clothes.

'Beneath' is formal and odd in this context; 'under' is the natural preposition. Also expand contraction for formality is optional; main issue is preposition choice.

× I do spend a lot of time putting clothes, OK?

✓ I do spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

'Putting clothes' is incorrect; the intended verb is 'choosing' when talking about selecting garments. Use 'choosing clothes' or 'trying on clothes' depending on meaning.

× Every time I go to a clothing shop at the mall, I spend hours choosing my favorite jacket or jumper as well as T-shirt.

✓ Every time I go to a clothing shop in the mall, I spend hours choosing my favorite jacket or jumper as well as T-shirts.

Use 'in the mall' (location) rather than 'at the mall' is acceptable but 'in the mall' is more natural here; also maintain plural 'T-shirts' when speaking generally. Alternatively 'at the mall' is also correct; main correction is plural.

× On the weekends I wear slightly informal clothes such as T-shirts with graffiti on them, and on weekdays I wear T-shirts which are relatively unique in colour.

✓ On weekends I wear slightly informal clothes such as T-shirts with graffiti on them, and on weekdays I wear T-shirts that are relatively unique in colour.

'On the weekends' is acceptable but 'on weekends' is more natural in general statements. 'Which' is acceptable but 'that' is more common in defining clauses. These are stylistic; main issue minor. Adjusted for natural phrasing.

× I like black colored and blue colored clothes.

✓ I like black and blue clothes.

'Black colored' and 'blue colored' are awkward; use the adjectival forms 'black' and 'blue.'

× I think that they don't appear to be dirty easily and there were seldom and majestic and style.

✓ I think that they do not show dirt easily and they rarely lose their smart appearance and style.

The original sentence has multiple structural and word-choice errors: incorrect tense 'were,' wrong adverb 'seldom' placement, and unclear words 'majestic and style.' Rewritten to convey intended meaning: clothes do not show dirt easily and rarely lose their smart look. Use parallel structure and correct verbs and adverbs.