Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce repetition and make a clear concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid trailing fragments. Focus on natural phrasing and correct minor hesitations.

例: I like wearing oversized, casual clothes such as big T-shirts, baggy jeans and hoodies because they are very comfortable. Moreover, they are practical — they’re easy to wash and don’t require much ironing.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then give two clear reasons using linking words. Avoid absolute statements like “I wear them always”; instead use natural frequency words. Vary vocabulary a bit to show range.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart outfits because they’re more practical and allow me to move freely. For example, baggy T‑shirts and jeans are quick to put on and suitable for most of my daily activities.

提案: Be concise and avoid unclear or awkward phrases. Give a clear reason and a brief personal example, using linking words. Remove vague lines like “I will wait for a very long time.”

例: Yes, I like wearing T‑shirts. I’ve worn them since childhood, so they feel familiar and comfortable, and they fit my style well.

提案: Give a direct answer then explain briefly with clear linking words. Use smoother phrasing and avoid repetition (e.g., “each dress, each clothes”). Be specific about the system you use.

例: No, I don’t. I organise my wardrobe by type and color, so I can find outfits quickly; therefore picking clothes takes only a few minutes.

提案: Clarify weekday vs weekend difference rather than saying ‘middays’. Use linking words and give a clear contrast with examples. Avoid repeating short sentences and explain why you choose certain colors.

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear simple, casual clothes for work or classes, but at weekends I choose brighter colors. For example, I wear pink or yellow when I visit a garden because those colors suit the setting and lift my mood.

提案: Answer directly, then give a short reason for each color or group similar colors together. Avoid stuttering and vague phrases like “help me blend in, in and out of the house.” Be specific about contexts for each color.

例: I like yellow and pink for casual outings because they’re bright and cheerful, while black and white are my go‑to choices for formal events since they look smart and versatile.

× I I like to wear big and baggy clothes like big T-shirts and baggy jeans and hoodies too because they are comfortable and easy to wash and also.

✓ I like to wear big, baggy clothes like oversized T-shirts, baggy jeans, and hoodies because they are comfortable and easy to wash.

The sentence duplicates 'I' and runs on with repeated ideas and conjunctions, causing a sentence structure error. Combine elements using commas and remove redundancy for clarity. Use 'oversized' instead of repeating 'big' and place items in a parallel list. Suggestion: Remove duplicate words, use commas for lists, and avoid unnecessary conjunctions.

× I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because they're easy to wear due to their baggy nature, especially big T-shirts and baggy jeans. I wear them always.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes because they are easy to wear due to their baggy nature, especially oversized T-shirts and baggy jeans. I always wear them.

The adverb 'always' is placed awkwardly at the end of the sentence; standard English places frequency adverbs before the main verb. Also 'they're' should be expanded to 'they are' for formality and parallel adjectives should be comma-separated. Suggestion: Place frequency adverbs before the main verb and punctuate adjective lists with commas.

× Yes, of course. I do like wearing T-shirts because growing up those are one of the dresses I frequently wore as a kid and it fits my body very much. And I think I will wait for a very long time because it's good.

✓ Yes, of course. I like wearing T-shirts because when I was growing up they were one of the garments I frequently wore as a kid, and they fit my body well. I think I will continue wearing them for a long time because they are comfortable.

Pronoun references are inconsistent ('those' with singular 'one', 'it' with plural 'T-shirts'). Also 'dresses' is the wrong noun for T-shirts; 'garments' or 'shirts' fits better. 'Growing up' needs a clause 'when I was growing up'. 'Fit my body very much' is unnatural; use 'fit my body well'. Suggestion: Keep number agreement between pronouns and nouns, use appropriate nouns, and phrase time expressions clearly.

× No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I arranged my clothes in a way that each dress, each clothes, it's placed in its own position and getting it, it's easy. It's very easy for me.

✓ No, I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I have arranged my clothes so that each item is in its own place, and getting it is easy. It's very easy for me.

Article and noun usage is incorrect: 'each clothes' is ungrammatical because 'clothes' is plural; use 'each item' or 'each piece of clothing'. Tense needs present perfect 'have arranged' to indicate a past action with present result. Remove unnecessary commas and contractions like 'it's' before verbs. Suggestion: Use 'each item' for singular reference to pieces of clothing, use present perfect for completed actions affecting the present, and simplify punctuation.

× Yes, I do wear different types of clothes on middays and weekends because I like to match colors with the weather. I like yellow. I like pink especially when I'm going to a garden. I usually take either pink or yellow. Most especially yellow because it's it makes me blend.

✓ Yes, I wear different types of clothes on weekdays and weekends because I like to match colors to the weather. I like yellow and pink, especially when I'm going to a garden. I usually choose either pink or yellow, especially yellow because it helps me blend in.

Preposition 'on middays' is incorrect; use 'on weekdays' or 'at midday' depending on meaning. 'Match colors with the weather' is better as 'match colors to the weather'. 'Take' is informal for choosing clothes; use 'choose'. 'Make me blend' needs the phrasal verb 'blend in'. Also remove duplicate 'it's'. Suggestion: Use correct time prepositions, prefer 'choose' for selecting clothes, and use established phrasal verbs like 'blend in'.

× I love yellow, I love pink, I love black, and I love white. Those four colors help me blend. In, in and out of the house and they make me feel warm and they are good colours for events.

✓ I love yellow, pink, black, and white. These four colors help me blend in, both inside and outside the house, and they make me feel warm; they are good colors for events.

Repetitive 'I love' can be condensed for natural speech. 'Those' is acceptable but 'these' feels closer to the speaker. The phrase 'In, in and out of the house' is fragmented and needs correction to 'both inside and outside the house'. Also 'colours' spelling is acceptable British English; keep consistent. Ensure pronoun reference and sentence flow by combining clauses. Suggestion: Combine repeated items into a single list, fix fragmented prepositional phrase, and use 'blend in' for the idiomatic expression.