Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitations and fix grammar (subject-verb agreement, pronouns). Give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words to make it coherent. For example, avoid repeating filler words like “uh” and replace with short pauses. Correct phrases: “they give me a good feeling,” “I have some T‑shirts and jeans that I can wear to most places, such as parties and the office.”

例: I prefer casual clothes because they are comfortable and practical. For example, I often wear T‑shirts and jeans that I can wear to most places, such as informal parties or a relaxed office environment.

提案: Avoid repetition and improve sentence fluency. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give specific reasons and an example. Fix word order and comparative structures: say “they make me feel more comfortable during work and meetings.”

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they make me feel more relaxed and focused during work and meetings. For instance, wearing a neat polo shirt helps me feel confident without being too formal.

提案: Be concise and correct collocations: say “T‑shirts make me feel comfortable” and “I can move easily in them.” Mention a specific reason and an example. Avoid “enjoy from weather” — say “enjoy the warm weather.”

例: Yes, I do. T‑shirts make me feel comfortable and allow me to move freely, which is ideal in summer when I can enjoy the warm weather outdoors.

提案: Correct grammar (use “she has a good eye” and “she chooses for me”). Be natural and brief: give one direct sentence and a short supporting detail. Use linking words like “because” appropriately.

例: No, I don't. My mother chooses my clothes because she has a good eye for matching outfits, so I usually let her pick what I wear.

提案: Make the contrast clearer and fix grammar: say “I wear formal clothes on weekdays and casual clothes at weekends.” Use linking words like “whereas” or “while” to show contrast, and give a brief reason or example.

例: Yes. I wear formal clothes on weekdays for work, whereas on weekends I prefer casual outfits so I can relax and be comfortable.

提案: Organize thoughts and correct vocabulary: say “I usually wear green and blue” and explain why. Avoid unclear phrases like “green scallops” or “scrap.” Keep it concise: topic sentence plus one reason. Provide a clear, specific reason (e.g. calming, professional association).

例: I prefer green and blue. As a midwife I often wear green at work, which feels calming and professional, and I also like blue because it makes me feel relaxed.

× I like to wear casual clothes because, uh, they are comfortable and, uh, and they are gives, they are give me a good feeling and I have some T-shirt and jeans that, uh, I can wear them, uh, in uh, most of places. Party office.

✓ I like to wear casual clothes because they are comfortable and they give me a good feeling. I have some T-shirts and jeans that I can wear in most places, for example parties or the office.

Multiple errors: subject-verb agreement ('they are gives' should be 'they give'), unnecessary repetition and incorrect object pronoun ('I can wear them' is redundant when 'that' is used), singular/plural ('T-shirt' -> 'T-shirts'), and sentence structure (run-on, unclear 'most of places' and fragment 'Party office'). Suggestion: use correct verb forms to agree with plural subject, keep clauses concise, use plural nouns when referring to more than one item, and separate ideas into clear sentences.

× I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because they they give me good feeling better at my work and in my meetings. Yes, I prefer them.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable and casual clothes because they give me a better feeling at work and during meetings. Yes, I prefer them.

Errors: duplicate word ('they they'), missing article/adjective order and comparative ('good feeling better' -> 'a better feeling'), and preposition use ('at my work' -> 'at work', 'in my meetings' -> 'during meetings'). Suggestion: remove repetitions, use 'a better feeling', and choose proper prepositions for context.

× Yes, because uh, T-shirts uh, give me a feeling better and I can move easily in in them and even in summer I can enjoy from weather.

✓ Yes, because T-shirts give me a better feeling and I can move easily in them, and even in summer I can enjoy the weather.

Errors: comparative form and article ('a feeling better' -> 'a better feeling'), duplicate word ('in in'), incorrect preposition 'enjoy from' should be 'enjoy' with direct object, and unnecessary fillers. Suggestion: use correct comparative adjective placement, remove duplicate words, and use 'enjoy the weather'.

× No, I don't because my mom instead of me does it uh, because uh, she have good eye for matching the rest together. Uh, so I prefer she, she does it for me.

✓ No, I don't, because my mom does it for me. She has a good eye for matching clothes, so I prefer that she does it for me.

Errors: awkward construction 'instead of me does it' should be 'does it for me'; subject-verb agreement ('she have' -> 'she has'); pronoun and clause clarity ('I prefer she, she does it for me' -> 'I prefer that she does it for me'). Suggestion: use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer subordinate clause with 'that' when expressing preference about another person's action.

× Yes I do because uh, I, I like uh, wear formal dress at my work, uh, in uh, weekdays and opposite of it I prefer umm, wear casual clothes in weekends.

✓ Yes, I do, because I like to wear formal clothes at work on weekdays, and on weekends I prefer to wear casual clothes.

Errors: missing infinitive 'to' before 'wear' ('like wear' -> 'like to wear'), article and noun choice ('formal dress' -> 'formal clothes'), preposition use ('at my work' -> 'at work', 'in weekdays' -> 'on weekdays', 'in weekends' -> 'on weekends'), and awkward phrase 'opposite of it'. Suggestion: use 'like to wear' or gerund consistently, correct prepositions for days, and parallel structure for contrast.

× I'm a midwife so I usually wear green clothes and green scallops and my car and my and my water so I prefer green and blue scrap and it give me it gives me feel better.

✓ I'm a midwife, so I usually wear green clothing and scrubs, and I also like green and blue. They make me feel better.

Errors: incorrect nouns ('scallops', 'scrap') likely intended 'scrubs' or 'scarves'; repetition and article errors ('my car and my and my water' is unclear and irrelevant), subject-verb agreement ('it give me' -> 'they make me'), and awkward phrasing ('it gives me feel better' -> 'they make me feel better'). Suggestion: choose correct vocabulary (scrubs, clothing), remove unrelated words, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use clear plural subjects matching plural verbs.