Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise by beginning with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (occasions, fabrics, or favorite items). Avoid repetition and keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: I prefer comfortable clothes, especially sportswear and activewear. For example, I often choose breathable cotton or moisture-wicking gym tops because they keep me cool when I exercise. I also don’t worry about brands; comfort matters more than labels.

提案: Start with a direct opinion, then use linking words (however, but, although) and give a clear example of an official situation. Remove repeated words and correct minor grammar for clarity.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes for everyday life because they allow me to move freely and feel relaxed. However, when I attend formal events or go to work, I wear smart clothes out of respect, for example a shirt and blazer for meetings.

提案: Give a clear direct answer first (yes/no), then explain why with specific reasons and smoother language. Avoid hesitations and unclear phrases; use linking words like because or so to connect ideas.

例: Not really — I don’t usually wear T-shirts. I prefer lightweight long-sleeve shirts because they protect my skin from strong sunlight, so I can avoid sunburn while staying cool.

提案: Respond directly then contrast routines with special occasions using linking words (but, however). Be specific about how much time and what you consider when choosing outfits for travel.

例: It depends. Usually I don’t spend much time — I just pick comfortable clothes and leave. However, when I travel or plan to take photos, I spend more time coordinating outfits, matching colors and styles so the pictures look good.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence, correct grammar (weekdays/weekends, school uniform), and provide one specific example of weekday attire and weekend attire. Use linking words to show contrast.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear my school uniform — usually a shirt and trousers — because the school requires it. On weekends I prefer casual clothes like hoodies and T-shirts because they make me feel relaxed.

提案: Start with a direct statement of preference, give reasons why (practicality, matching), and mention a specific occasion you'd try brighter colors. Avoid repeating the same idea and use smoother phrasing.

例: I usually prefer neutral colours like black, white and grey because they are easy to mix and match. However, I’d like to try brighter colours such as red or blue for special occasions or when I want to stand out in photos.

× I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because they can let me move freely and feel let me feel relaxed.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because they allow me to move freely and make me feel relaxed.

The original uses 'let me' incorrectly and repeats 'let me feel'. Use 'allow' for enabling action and 'make me feel' to describe causing a feeling. This corrects verb pattern and removes repetition.

× However, in some official official place, we have to wear smart clothes, which is a politeness.

✓ However, in some official places, we have to wear smart clothes, which is polite.

'official official place' is a repetition and should be plural 'places' when speaking generally. 'which is a politeness' is awkward; use adjective 'polite' to describe the action. This fixes redundancy and incorrect noun usage.

× Uh, to be honest, I'm not very AT shirt lover.

✓ Uh, to be honest, I'm not a big fan of T-shirts.

'AT shirt lover' is incorrect word order and form. Use the noun phrase 'a big fan of T-shirts' to express dislike. Also 'T-shirts' is the common term.

× I prefer a shirt for example, like very thin shirt.

✓ I prefer shirts that are, for example, very thin.

Original misorders articles and nouns. Use plural 'shirts' when speaking generally and place adjectives before nouns; include commas for the parenthetical 'for example.'

× I don't really like my arms or my skin outside of the sunshine so that will help me to avoid some burn.

✓ I don't really like having my arms or skin exposed to the sun because that helps me avoid sunburn.

Use 'exposed to the sun' rather than 'outside of the sunshine.' 'Avoid sunburn' is the correct collocation. Also change noun forms for clarity ('having my arms or skin exposed').

× Uh, it will depend.

✓ Uh, it depends.

When answering about habit or general situation, use simple present 'it depends' rather than 'it will depend.'

× I just grab a random clothes and just rush out of my home.

✓ I just grab random clothes and rush out of my house.

'clothes' is plural so do not use 'a random'; use 'random clothes.' 'my home' is understandable but 'my house' or 'home' without 'my' is preferred. Also remove redundant 'just.'

× However, if I'm on the travel, I really want to have a good photos so so that I will like spend a lot of time to choose good clothes.

✓ However, if I'm traveling, I really want to have good photos, so I will spend a lot of time choosing good clothes.

Use gerund 'traveling' not 'on the travel.' 'a good photos' mixes singular and plural; use 'good photos.' Remove unnecessary words ('so so that I will like') and use 'spend time choosing' with gerund form.

× Yes I do in the weekday.

✓ Yes, I do on weekdays.

Use plural 'weekdays' when referring to the general category. Include comma after 'Yes.'

× On the weekdays our school have a rule that we need to wear small small clothes so that I need to wear a shirt or some really small suit.

✓ On weekdays our school has a rule that we need to wear formal clothes, so I need to wear a shirt or a suit.

Subject 'school' is singular and requires 'has.' 'small small clothes' is incorrect; likely meant 'formal clothes' or 'smart clothes.' Use 'a suit' not 'really small suit.' Fix conjunction and wording for clarity.

× However, in my weekend weekends I usually wear hoodies and T-shirts.

✓ However, on weekends I usually wear hoodies and T-shirts.

Use 'on weekends' not 'in my weekend weekends.' Plural 'weekends' for general habit.

× This can make me feel relaxed.

✓ This makes me feel relaxed.

Use simple present 'makes' to describe habitual result; 'can make' is acceptable but 'makes' is more natural here.

× Normally I like to wear black, white or grey clothes.

✓ Normally, I like to wear black, white, or grey clothes.

Add commas after introductory adverb and between list items for clarity. (This is punctuation rather than grammar but improves readability.)

× Those three colors are really easy to match with other colors.

✓ Those three colors are really easy to match with other colors.

Sentence is acceptable; no grammatical change needed. Keep as is.

× So that is a really matchable color for me.

✓ So they are really easy to match for me.

'Matchable' is uncommon; rephrase to 'easy to match.' Match plurality with 'they' referring to colors.

× But also I really want to try like red or blue this thing.

✓ But I would also like to try wearing red or blue.

Original includes filler 'like' and 'this thing' which are unnatural. Use 'would like to try wearing' and list colors cleanly.