Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and sentence structure: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and correct verb forms and articles. Be specific about what makes the T-shirts 'unique' and give one brief reason. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' correctly and keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I usually wear jeans and distinctive T-shirts because I like clothing that shows my personality. For example, I prefer T-shirts with bold prints or quirky designs so I don’t feel like I’m blending in with everyone else.

提案: Make a clear topic sentence and fix grammar (use nouns and adjectives correctly). Remove filler words, be concise, and give one specific reason with a linking phrase. Replace vague phrases like 'do something with' with a concrete activity.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they make me feel relaxed. For example, when I wear sneakers and a soft T-shirt I can move freely and speak confidently in class or when meeting friends.

提案: Clarify and correct vocabulary and grammar: say 'Yes, I am a big fan of T-shirts.' Avoid mixed-up words like 'T shoes' or 'piece in it.' Give one clear example of when you wear them and why. Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I am a big fan of T-shirts because they are comfortable. For instance, I often wear a plain T-shirt and jeans for classroom presentations because it helps me feel relaxed and confident while speaking.

提案: Provide a direct short answer then a clear reason. Correct word choice ('pick clothes or shoes close to me', 'prepare' instead of 'preparing') and remove redundancy. Give a specific example of the method you use to save time.

例: Not really. I usually pick clothes and shoes that are nearby to save time. For example, I choose a simple outfit I wear often so I can get ready quickly in the morning.

提案: Answer directly and use correct verb forms and singular/plural agreement. Avoid repetition and give one clear reason with a linking word. Provide a concrete example contrasting weekday and weekend if applicable.

例: No, I don't. I usually wear the same casual style every day because it's convenient. For example, I often wear a T-shirt and jeans during the week and also on weekends to save time.

提案: Correct the colour word ('black') and improve coherence: give a clear topic sentence and two concise reasons. Avoid unclear endings. Provide specific contexts and one brief explanation why black works in those situations.

例: I prefer black clothing because it looks formal and matches most occasions. For example, black is appropriate for school and weddings, and it’s easy to pair with other items so I don’t worry about matching.

× I like to wearing a clothes that not similar to others because I feel like I'm blending when I have to go outside.

✓ I like to wear clothes that are not similar to others because I feel like I'm blending in when I go outside.

The verb form after 'like to' should be the base form 'wear', not 'wearing'. 'A clothes' is incorrect: 'clothes' is plural and does not take 'a'. 'Not similar to others' needs a verb: use 'are not similar to others'. 'Blending' requires the preposition 'in' and the tense should be simple present 'when I go outside' to match habitual action.

× I like to wearing a clothes that not similar to others because I feel like I'm blending when I have to go outside.

✓ I like to wear clothes that are not similar to others because I feel like I'm blending in when I go outside.

'A clothes' is a quantifier/article error: 'clothes' is a plural noun, so remove 'a' or use 'a piece of clothing'. Correct use is 'clothes' without 'a'.

× I think it's because umm, it's make me feel relaxed and comfort when I have to go outside or meet the people or whether it be my friends or my teachers, I think I can talk properly and do something with.

✓ I think it's because, um, it makes me feel relaxed and comfortable when I go out or meet people, whether they are my friends or my teachers. I think I can speak properly and do things with them.

With third-person singular subject 'it' the verb must be 'makes' not 'make'. Use the adjective 'comfortable' instead of the noun 'comfort'. 'Go outside' -> 'go out' is more natural; 'meet the people' -> 'meet people'. 'Whether it be' -> 'whether they are'. 'Do something with' needs an object: 'do things with them'. Present simple fits habitual actions.

× I think it's because umm, it's make me feel relaxed and comfort when I have to go outside or meet the people or whether it be my friends or my teachers, I think I can talk properly and do something with.

✓ I think it's because, um, it makes me feel relaxed and comfortable when I go out or meet people, whether they are my friends or my teachers. I think I can speak properly and do things with them.

Use the adjective 'comfortable' (not 'comfort') to describe how someone feels. 'Properly' is acceptable for 'talk properly', but clarify 'do something with' to 'do things with them'.

× Absolutely yes we I'm a big fan of T-shirts because it makes me feel comfortable and relaxed.

✓ Absolutely yes, I'm a big fan of T-shirts because they make me feel comfortable and relaxed.

Subject/pronoun and verb form: 'we I'm' is ungrammatical; use 'I'm'. 'It makes' should agree with plural noun 'T-shirts' so use 'they make'.

× I usually wear T shoes when I have to presentation in the front of my classroom and I feel comfort and can piece in it properly and friendly.

✓ I usually wear T-shirts when I have to give a presentation at the front of my classroom, and I feel comfortable and can present it properly and in a friendly way.

'T shoes' is likely a confusion with 'T-shirts'. 'Have to presentation' needs the verb 'give a presentation'. 'In the front of my classroom' -> 'at the front of my classroom'. Use adjective 'comfortable' not 'comfort'. 'Can piece in it' unclear; intended 'present it'. Add 'in a friendly way' for clarity.

× Not at all for me I just peek close or shoes that closer to me because I think it easy and can reduce the preparing time to go outside.

✓ Not at all. For me, I just pick clothes or shoes that are close to me because I think it's easy and reduces the time needed to prepare to go out.

Sentence run-on and unclear verbs: 'peek close' should be 'pick clothes'. 'Closer to me' should be 'that are close to me' or 'that I like'. 'It easy' -> 'it's easy'. 'Can reduce the preparing time' -> 'reduces the time needed to prepare'.

× Not at all for me I just peek close or shoes that closer to me because I think it easy and can reduce the preparing time to go outside. I don't want to waste my time but whether select some shoes or some clothes.

✓ Not at all. For me, I just pick clothes or shoes that are close to me because I think it's easy and reduces the time needed to prepare to go out. I don't want to waste time selecting shoes or clothes.

Pronoun and phrasing: 'whether select some shoes or some clothes' is incorrect; use 'selecting shoes or clothes'. Remove unnecessary 'my' in 'waste my time' optional but acceptable; streamline to 'waste time'.

× From me I think definitely definitely not because I usually wearing clothes same every single day.

✓ For me, I think definitely not because I usually wear the same clothes every single day.

After 'usually' use base verb 'wear', not 'wearing'. Also 'clothes same' needs article 'the same clothes' to be grammatical.

× I think it's very convenient and relaxed. It save time and I'm getting ready and helps me to avoid within time deciding what to wear.

✓ I think it's very convenient and comfortable. It saves time when I'm getting ready and helps me avoid wasting time deciding what to wear.

Use 'comfortable' rather than 'relaxed' to describe clothing/situation. 'It save' should be 'It saves' (subject-verb agreement). 'Helps me to avoid within time deciding' is ungrammatical; use 'helps me avoid wasting time deciding'.

× I prefer back because I think it's very formal and usual.

✓ I prefer black because I think it's very formal and common.

'Back' is a typo for 'black'. 'Usual' is not natural here; use 'common' or 'usual' as adjective but 'common' fits better. Also ensure spelling correction.

× This is because when you go to a wedding or go to school, I think it's a very proper color that blend with the situation or environment and you're not have to.

✓ This is because when you go to a wedding or to school, I think it's an appropriate color that blends with the situation or environment, and you don't have to stand out.

Run-on and missing verbs: 'a very proper color that blend' needs 'an appropriate color that blends'. 'You're not have to' is incorrect; change to 'you don't have to stand out' to convey intended meaning.