Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use natural phrasing. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Avoid repetition and grammatical errors (e.g., use singular/plural correctly and correct verb forms).

例: I prefer wearing summer clothes because they are lightweight and more comfortable. For example, cotton shirts and shorts help me stay cool in warm weather, whereas my winter clothes feel tight and make it harder to breathe.

提案: Good structure and direct response; improve fluency by removing fillers and repeating words. Use a linking phrase to contrast the two situations and give a brief specific example of what you wear in each case.

例: It depends on the occasion. For instance, if I’m meeting someone or going to an interview, I wear smart clothes like a shirt and chinos; whereas at home I choose comfortable casuals such as a T-shirt and sweatpants.

提案: Answer directly and avoid filler words. Give more specific details about the styles or reasons why you like logo T-shirts, using one linking word to expand the idea.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts, especially ones with bold logos. For example, I often choose branded T-shirts with graphic prints because they show my interests and are easy to pair with jeans.

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. State the main idea, then one clear reason with a linking word. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'have a good attention to the others'—use 'make a good impression' instead.

例: Yes, I do spend quite a bit of time choosing clothes because I want to make a good impression. For example, if I’m meeting someone important, I pick an outfit that looks neat and appropriate for the occasion.

提案: Remove fillers and repeat phrases. Use correct articles and plural forms (e.g., 'smart clothes' not 'a smart clothes'). Give one specific example for weekday vs weekend attire and use a linking word to contrast.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear smart clothes for school, such as a collared shirt and trousers, whereas on weekends I usually wear casual clothes like a hoodie and jeans because I stay at home and relax.

提案: Be more natural and avoid redundancy (e.g., 'colour clothes' unnecessary). Correct grammar for plural and possessive (e.g., 'designer logos' and 'their front and back'). Provide a brief reason why you choose those colours.

例: I prefer black and blue clothes, especially black T-shirts with designer logos. I like these colours because they are easy to match and look stylish, and logos add a fashionable touch.

× According to me, wearing the summer clothes is good option for me because they are more comfortable as compared to wearing clothes in winter because they are tight and makes me uncomfortable to breathe.

✓ In my opinion, wearing summer clothes is a good option for me because they are more comfortable compared to winter clothes, which are tight and make it difficult for me to breathe.

Errors: unnecessary 'According to me' (use 'In my opinion'); incorrect article 'the summer clothes' and 'the winter'—use no article for general clothing; redundancy and awkward structure. 'Wearing the summer clothes' is a gerund phrase used awkwardly; simplify to 'wearing summer clothes'. Subject-verb agreement: 'clothes ... makes' should be 'make'. 'Makes me uncomfortable to breathe' is unnatural; use 'make it difficult for me to breathe'. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use correct articles for general nouns, ensure verb agrees with plural subject, and use natural collocations for breathing difficulty.

× It it basically depends upon the occasion.

✓ It basically depends on the occasion.

Errors: typo 'It it' -> remove duplicate. Preposition: 'depends upon' is acceptable but 'depends on' is more natural. No subject-verb issue beyond typo. Suggestion: remove duplication and use 'depends on'.

× When I have to go outside my house to meet someone, I usually wear smart clothes.

✓ When I have to go out of my house to meet someone, I usually wear smart clothes.

'Go outside my house' is understandable but 'go out of my house' or simply 'go out' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'go out' or 'go out of my house'.

× When I am at my home, I prefer to wear casual clothes.

✓ When I am at home, I prefer to wear casual clothes.

Use 'at home' without the possessive 'my'. 'At my home' is possible but less natural in this context. Suggestion: use standard collocation 'at home'.

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts. Basically, I like to wear T-shirts with the various kinds of logos, uh, printed on the front of the T-shirt as well as on the back of the T-shirt.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts. Basically, I like to wear T-shirts with various kinds of logos printed on the front and back.

Errors: unnecessary article 'the' before 'various kinds'; repetitive phrasing 'on the front of the T-shirt as well as on the back of the T-shirt' can be shortened. 'The various kinds of logos' should be 'various kinds of logos' or simply 'various logos'. Suggestion: remove fillers (uh), eliminate repetition, and use concise phrasing.

× Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing my clothes because whenever I have to wear clothes when I have to meet someone outside my house, I prefer to spend most time finding my clothes so that I could look more impressive and have a good attention to the others.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing my clothes because whenever I need to meet someone outside my house, I prefer to spend most of the time finding clothes so that I can look more impressive and attract others' attention.

Errors: redundancy 'have to wear clothes when I have to meet someone'; awkward 'prefer to spend most time' -> 'most of the time'; incorrect modal 'could' should be 'can' for present habitual situations; 'have a good attention to the others' -> 'attract others' attention'. Suggestion: remove repetition, use 'need' or 'have to' once, use correct articles and prepositional phrases, and use appropriate modal verbs for present habits.

× During weekdays, uh, I have to go for my school and colleges, so I prefer to wear a smart clothes, while during the weekends I prefer to wear casual clothes because most of the time I spend my time, uh, most of the days I spend my time in my house.

✓ On weekdays, I have to go to school and college, so I prefer to wear smart clothes, while on weekends I prefer to wear casual clothes because I spend most days at home.

Errors: use 'on weekdays'/'on weekends' not 'during' here; 'go for my school and colleges' should be 'go to school and college'; article error 'a smart clothes' should be 'smart clothes' (no article, plural); redundant phrases 'most of the time I spend my time, most of the days I spend my time' -> 'I spend most days at home'. Suggestion: simplify, use correct prepositions, remove unnecessary articles with plural nouns, and avoid repetition.

× Since my favorite colour is black and blue, I prefer to wear black and blue colour clothes, especially the black T-shirts which have a designer logos printed on its front as well as on the back.

✓ Since my favorite colors are black and blue, I prefer to wear black and blue clothes, especially black T-shirts that have designer logos printed on the front and back.

Errors: 'colour is black and blue' -> plural 'colors are'; 'black and blue colour clothes' is redundant; 'a designer logos' wrong article and number -> 'designer logos'; pronoun 'its front' refers to T-shirts (plural) so use none or 'their front'; use 'that' not 'which' for defining clause in casual speech. Suggestion: ensure number agreement (singular/plural), remove redundant words, and match pronouns with plural nouns.