Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid hesitation and repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words (e.g., because, for example). Remove filler words like "umm" and avoid repeating words (e.g., "daily daily").

例: I prefer casual clothes because they suit my personality and are comfortable. For example, I often wear jeans and simple tops because they come in many colors and are easy to mix and match for everyday activities.

提案: Use present simple for habitual situations and reduce hesitation. Begin with a clear direct answer (e.g., "It depends") and then give specific contrasting examples using linking words (e.g., "whereas", "however"). Avoid repeating vague phrases like "some people".

例: It depends on the occasion. If I'm staying at home or meeting friends, I usually wear comfortable casual clothes; however, if I'm meeting new people or attending a formal event, I choose smarter outfits to make a good impression.

提案: Give a short clear opinion and add a brief specific reason. Avoid absolutes and filler words. Use linking words (e.g., "however") to connect contrasting ideas and be specific about the kinds of events where T-shirts are inappropriate.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and versatile for everyday use. However, I would avoid them for formal events or job interviews because they can look too casual and unprofessional.

提案: Simplify the answer and use clear grammar. State the main point first (e.g., "No, I don't spend much time") then explain briefly how you plan outfits in advance. Remove redundancy and correct tense usage.

例: No, I don't spend much time choosing clothes. I usually pick my outfit the night before, which saves time in the morning and avoids last-minute decisions.

提案: Finish your sentence and avoid trailing off. Use clearer structure: state whether you dress differently, then give one or two precise examples with linking words. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition of phrases like "my clothes, my outfit."

例: Yes, I dress differently on weekdays and weekends. For example, on weekdays I wear more smart-casual clothes for work, whereas at the weekend I choose relaxed outfits based on my mood or activities, such as jeans and a T-shirt for meeting friends.

提案: Avoid repetition and small grammar errors. Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons with linking words. Correct errors like "are is" and avoid repeating words like "my my."

例: I prefer neutral colours because they are easy to match with accessories and give a simple, timeless look. For instance, I often choose beige, black, or navy so my bags and shoes coordinate easily.

× I prefer wearing casual clothes because I find it comfortable and more like my personality.

✓ I prefer wearing casual clothes because I find them comfortable and they suit my personality better.

Pronoun agreement: 'clothes' is plural, so use plural pronouns 'them'. Also 'more like my personality' is unnatural; use 'suit my personality' or 'fit my personality'. Improve clarity by adding 'better'. Suggestion: Use plural pronouns to match plural nouns and choose verbs/phrases that collocate naturally (e.g., 'suit my personality').

× I think that casual clothes have a wide range of umm designs and colors which I can wear them on a daily daily life basis.

✓ I think that casual clothes have a wide range of designs and colors which I can wear on a daily basis.

'Wide range of designs and colors' is fine, but 'which I can wear them' has a redundant object pronoun 'them' after 'which'. Also 'daily daily life basis' is repetitive; use 'daily basis'. Suggestion: Remove redundant pronouns after relative pronouns and avoid repetition.

× It depends on the activities that I was planning to do on that day.

✓ It depends on the activities that I am planning to do that day.

Tense consistency: The question is about general preference for a day, so present continuous 'I am planning' or simple present 'I plan' is appropriate. 'Was planning' incorrectly shifts to past. Also 'on that day' can be simplified to 'that day'. Suggestion: Use present tense for current or general plans.

× If I were to stay at home or just hang out with friends, then I would prefer comfortable clothes.

✓ If I were to stay at home or just hang out with friends, I would prefer comfortable clothes.

Redundancy of 'then' is not strictly grammatical but can be removed for conciseness. The sentence otherwise uses correct subjunctive 'If I were...' with conditional 'would prefer'. Suggestion: Omit unnecessary words like 'then' to improve fluency.

× But if I were to go out or go somewhere, meet with umm, some people, some new people, then I would prefer smart clothes.

✓ But if I were to go out to meet new people, I would prefer smart clothes.

Sentence is wordy and repetitive ('go out or go somewhere, meet with some people, some new people'). Simplify to 'go out to meet new people'. Remove redundant 'then'. Suggestion: Combine phrases and avoid repetition for clarity.

× Yes I do. I find it very comfortable and umm, you can wear it at any day, anytime.

✓ Yes, I do. I find them very comfortable, and you can wear them any day, at any time.

Pronoun agreement: 'T-shirts' is plural, so use 'them' not 'it'. 'Any day, anytime' needs punctuation and 'at any time' is the correct phrase. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns match noun number and use standard adverbial phrases.

× But if I were to go out or attend an event, of course not. I would not wear a T-shirt because it would look unprofessional.

✓ But if I were to go out or attend an event, of course I would not wear a T-shirt because it would look unprofessional.

Sentence fragment: 'of course not.' should be integrated into full sentence. Adding 'I would' clarifies the subject and maintains conditional structure. Suggestion: Avoid sentence fragments; keep subject and verb present.

× I would say less than average of women who chooses clothes because I would tend to think beforehand or choose them before the night that I'm going out, which makes me, which makes me save more time in the morning where I'm going out that.

✓ I would say I spend less time than the average woman choosing clothes because I tend to decide beforehand, the night before I go out, which saves me time in the morning.

Multiple issues: subject-verb agreement ('women who chooses' incorrect—should be 'women who choose' or rephrase), awkward comparative phrasing ('less than average of women' -> 'less time than the average woman'), redundant clauses ('which makes me' repeated), and wrong relative clause 'where I'm going out that'. Suggestion: Simplify sentence, fix subject-verb agreement, and use clear comparative structures.

× I would say quite different because each day I would choose my clothes, my outfit of the day according to my mood or where or what I'm doing on that day.

✓ I would say quite different, because each day I choose my outfit according to my mood or what I am doing that day.

Unnecessary repetition 'my clothes, my outfit of the day' is redundant. Tense: use simple present 'I choose' for habitual actions rather than 'would choose'. Also 'where or what I'm doing on that day' is wordy; simplify to 'what I am doing that day'. Suggestion: Use simple present for routines and remove redundant phrases.

× For such as if I was going out to meet a friend, I would choose something more casual, but if I.

✓ For example, if I were going out to meet a friend, I would choose something more casual.

Sentence fragment: original ends with 'but if I.' which is incomplete. 'For such as' is incorrect; use 'For example'. Also use subjunctive 'if I were' for hypothetical situations. Suggestion: Complete the sentence and use correct introductory phrase.

× I prefer neutral colored clothes because I find it easy to match with accessories and bags.

✓ I prefer neutral-colored clothes because I find them easy to match with accessories and bags.

Hyphenation: 'neutral-colored' as compound adjective is clearer. Pronoun agreement: 'clothes' plural so use 'them' not 'it'. Suggestion: Match pronouns to noun number and use hyphen in compound adjectives.

× Moreover, I feel like neutral colored clothes and simple designs are is more my my style.

✓ Moreover, I feel that neutral-colored clothes and simple designs are more my style.

Redundancy and verb error: 'are is' contains conflicting verbs; choose 'are'. Remove duplicate 'my my'. Use 'that' or remove 'like' for formality; maintain plural agreement 'are'. Suggestion: Proofread to remove repeated words and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× It suits my style.

✓ They suit my style.

Pronoun agreement: 'neutral-colored clothes and simple designs' are plural, so 'they suit' not 'it suits'. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns and verbs agree in number with their antecedents.