Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify and correct unclear phrases and keep answer concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid vague or incorrect expressions (e.g. “MMM Wednesday” unclear). Use linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: I prefer minimalistic clothes, mainly in black and white. For example, I often choose simple designs and neutral tones because bright colors feel too harsh for my eyes.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, then one clear reason and an example. Improve grammar (e.g. "traditional activities" not "a traditional activities") and use linking words like "but" or "however" to show contrast.

例: It depends on the occasion. I usually wear casual clothes on weekends because I want to relax, but I wear formal clothes to conferences or traditional ceremonies in Thailand.

提案: Make a clear, concise statement and remove confusing words like "oversight clothes." Use one or two specific supporting details and correct grammar (e.g. "they show" not "it's show").

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are casual and make me feel relaxed and easygoing. I also enjoy dresses occasionally for more formal or feminine occasions.

提案: Begin with a direct answer, then explain briefly why using linking words like "because" or "so." Fix small grammar issues and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Not really, I don't enjoy window shopping so I usually buy clothes online. Because I shop online and make quick decisions, I rarely spend a long time choosing items.

提案: Answer directly and simplify. Explain job requirements clearly and contrast weekday vs weekend clothes with one linking word such as "however." Correct awkward phrases (e.g. "even I'm a female" unnecessary) and unclear words like "oversight T-shirt."

例: Yes. Because I work in academia and sometimes at the police academy, I usually wear formal clothes such as suits during weekdays. However, on weekends I prefer casual outfits like T-shirts and jeans.

提案: Be clear and coherent: state current preference, mention past preference, and give a concise reason. Avoid unclear phrases like "everything shipped" and "3 cast." Use specific vocabulary and one linking word such as "because" or "since."

例: I prefer white and cream clothing now. I used to wear a lot of black, but after spending over four years in a different environment, my style changed to lighter, more neutral colors because they feel fresher and more suitable for my daily life.

× I love to wear minimalistic clothes because I feel like colorful clothes irritated my eyes.

✓ I love to wear minimalist clothes because I feel like colorful clothes irrit my eyes.

'minimalistic' is less common than the adjective 'minimalist' to describe clothing. The verb tense 'irritated' suggests past; the context is general, so present simple 'irritate' is correct. Use 'irritate my eyes' for habitual states.

× I think myself more like MMM Wednesday because I love black and white and maybe a little bit of a tone colour on clothes.

✓ I think of myself as more of a minimal, monochrome person because I love black and white and maybe a little bit of muted color in my clothes.

The phrase 'I think myself' is incorrect; use 'I think of myself as' or 'I consider myself'. 'MMM Wednesday' is unclear; I replaced with a clear description. 'Tone colour' is unclear; 'muted color' or 'a bit of color' is natural. Use consistent noun phrases.

× It depends on situations.

✓ It depends on the situation.

Use singular 'the situation' or plural 'situations' with an article; 'depends on situations' is awkward. 'It depends on the situation' is the natural present simple expression.

× I would rather wear casual clothes on my weekend and maybe some holidays.

✓ I prefer to wear casual clothes on weekends and sometimes on holidays.

'Would rather' is not necessary when stating a general preference; use present simple 'prefer'. 'My weekend' should be plural 'weekends' for habitual action. 'Maybe some holidays' -> 'sometimes on holidays' is clearer.

× And I would prefer to wear formal clothes from any formal gathering like a conference or maybe a traditional activities in Thailand.

✓ And I would prefer to wear formal clothes for any formal gathering, like a conference or traditional activities in Thailand.

Use 'for' to indicate purpose or occasion, not 'from'. 'a traditional activities' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'traditional activities' or 'a traditional activity'.

× I love so wearing T-shirts is very casual and it's show that I'm easy going and I also feel like I love more of oversight clothes because it's helped me become much more comfortable with my own self.

✓ I love wearing T-shirts because they are very casual and they show that I'm easygoing. I also prefer oversized clothes because they help me feel much more comfortable with myself.

Remove extraneous 'so'. 'T-shirts is' should be 'T-shirts are' (plural). 'it's show' -> 'they show'. 'easy going' -> 'easygoing' as one word. 'I love more of oversight clothes' is unclear; 'prefer oversized clothes' is likely intended. 'it's helped' should be 'they help' to match plural and present habitual meaning.

× Like I also love some dress as well but it's not a.

✓ I also like dresses, but not very often.

Original is fragmented and unclear. 'Some dress' -> 'dresses' (plural) and finish the thought. 'it's not a' is incomplete; provide a complete clause such as 'but not very often' to express limited preference.

× I don't love window shopping so I don't spend lots of time choosing clothes.

✓ I don't like window shopping, so I don't spend a lot of time choosing clothes.

Use 'like' instead of 'love' for preference nuance if intended; 'lots of time' is informal—'a lot of time' is standard. Keep negative contraction 'don't' consistent.

× I prefer online shopping so that why I spend less time shopping on clothes.

✓ I prefer online shopping, so that's why I spend less time shopping for clothes.

Insert 'that's' to form 'that's why'. Use 'shopping for clothes' rather than 'shopping on clothes'.

× But more like I think I feel something I like I just buy it immediately.

✓ If I see something I like, I usually buy it immediately.

Original sequence is awkward. Use a conditional 'If I see something I like' to express the habit, and 'usually' to indicate frequency.

× Definitely it's in my job, it's more of academia and amateur at the police Academy.

✓ Definitely; in my job, I work more in academia and I am also an amateur at the police academy.

Original is fragmented and ungrammatical. Clarify roles: 'in my job' needs a verb phrase. 'Police Academy' should be lowercased 'academy' unless a proper name; 'amateur at' is odd but preserved with 'also an amateur' to indicate nonprofessional involvement.

× I would say that on my weekdays I wear lots of formal clothes like suit and tie even I'm a female and on my holidays, maybe on my weekends I would do more like casual clothes like oversight T-shirt and maybe some.

✓ I would say that on weekdays I wear a lot of formal clothes, like suits and ties, even though I'm female. On holidays or weekends I wear more casual clothes, like oversized T-shirts.

Subject-verb and number agreement: 'lots of formal clothes like suit and tie' needs plural 'suits and ties' or 'a suit and tie'. 'even I'm a female' should be 'even though I'm female'. 'would do more like casual clothes' is awkward; use 'wear more casual clothes'. 'oversight' -> 'oversized'.

× I love white on clothes.

✓ I like wearing white clothes.

'Love white on clothes' is unnatural. Use 'like wearing white clothes' or 'I love white clothing'.

× I would say that in the past I love to wear black color.

✓ I would say that in the past I loved to wear black.

When referring to a past habit, use past tense 'loved' rather than present 'love'. 'black color' is redundant; 'black' suffices.

× However everything shipped because I was 3 cast for more than four years already so it effect on my personal cover.

✓ However, everything changed because I was stationed at a place for more than four years, so it affected my personal color preferences.

Sentence is unclear and uses wrong verbs: 'shipped' likely intended 'changed'. 'I was 3 cast' is unintelligible; I interpreted as 'stationed' or 'based'—confirm with the speaker. Use past tense 'changed' and 'affected' for past events. 'personal cover' unclear; likely 'personal color' or 'style'.

× It turned out to be cream and white because it's.

✓ It turned out to be cream and white.

Original ends with an incomplete clause 'because it's.' Remove the unfinished fragment to make a complete sentence. If an explanation is needed, supply a full clause (e.g., 'because it's more comfortable').