Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more fluent and avoid hesitations and wrong word choices. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep it within 3–4 concise sentences and correct word usage (e.g., use "allow" not "alarm").

例: I prefer casual clothes because they make me feel comfortable and allow me to move easily during daily activities. For example, I usually wear a T-shirt with trousers or jeans almost every day because it is practical and low-maintenance.

提案: Use correct grammar and smoother linking. Give a concise direct answer, then contrast with the exception using a linking word like "however" and include a brief reason. Avoid redundant words and fix sentence structure (e.g., "I prefer casual clothes because they make me feel relaxed").

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they make me feel relaxed. However, if I have to attend a professional meeting, I choose smart clothes to create a good impression.

提案: Good concise answer. Reduce hesitations and combine ideas more smoothly using a linking word (e.g., "and"). Add one brief specific example to strengthen content. Keep it natural and within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to put on, and they rarely need ironing. For example, I often wear a T-shirt for quick errands or when I meet friends on weekends.

提案: Fix grammar and avoid fillers. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a contrasting detail using a linking word. Correct phrases like "I do spend more time" and "smart outfits" (no article or use "a smart outfit").

例: I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I usually put on casual items like a T-shirt and trousers. However, I do spend more time choosing an outfit when I need to dress smartly for work or a special event.

提案: Be careful with consistency and avoid contradicting yourself. Use correct words and tense. Begin with a clear statement, then contrast weekdays vs weekends with linking words. Fix errors like repeating "weekday" and "I can't comfortable" (should be "I feel comfortable").

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear smart clothes for work, such as a shirt and trousers, because I want to look professional. In contrast, on weekends I dress more casually, for example jeans with T-shirts, because I feel more comfortable relaxing.

提案: Correct word choice and grammar: use "I wear" not "I write," and use plural/adjective agreement ("earth tones" or "neutral colours"). Start with a direct statement, then give specific reasons and a brief example of colors you choose.

例: I usually wear earth tones or neutral colours because they feel calm and are easy to match with other items. For example, I often choose beige, olive, or grey when I buy shirts or trousers.

× I prefer to wear casual clothes because they make me more, uh, comfortable and alarm me to move around easily during, uh, daily activities.

✓ I prefer to wear casual clothes because they make me more comfortable and allow me to move around easily during daily activities.

The original uses 'alarm me to move around' which is incorrect; 'alarm' is a noun/verb meaning to frighten or alert, not to enable movement. 'Allow' is the correct verb meaning 'make possible'. Also, 'more, uh, comfortable' should be 'more comfortable' without filler. Remove unnecessary fillers and adjust word choice for clarity.

× You know, uh, for example, almost every day I wear only, uh, T-shirt with trousers or jeans.

✓ For example, almost every day I wear only a T-shirt with trousers or jeans.

The phrase 'T-shirt' needs an indefinite article 'a' when singular countable noun is used. 'T-shirt' is countable, so use 'a T-shirt'.

× Absolutely, I prefer to wear comfortable casual clothes is because makes me feel relaxed.

✓ Absolutely, I prefer to wear comfortable, casual clothes because they make me feel relaxed.

The original incorrectly includes 'is' and omits the subject for 'makes'. Correct structure uses 'because' + subject 'they' + verb 'make'. Also add a comma between adjectives 'comfortable' and 'casual'.

× However, if I need to go to a professional environment, I will choose the smart clothes for a good impression.

✓ However, if I need to go to a professional environment, I will choose smart clothes to make a good impression.

'The smart clothes' implies specific clothes; use 'smart clothes' generally. Also 'for a good impression' is awkward; 'to make a good impression' is the correct purpose structure.

× They don't need, uh, ironing either, so they are perfect for busy days or casual outings.

✓ They don't need ironing either, so they are perfect for busy days or casual outings.

Remove filler 'uh'. The gerund 'ironing' is correct; no change needed besides removing hesitation.

× I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I usually wear casual items, for example, uh, my T-shirts with trousers, you know?

✓ I don't spend much time choosing clothes because I usually wear casual items, for example my T-shirts with trousers.

Remove filler words 'uh' and 'you know' which are conversational and unnecessary in corrected sentence. Structure is otherwise fine.

× However, I do more time when I need to wear a smart outfits.

✓ However, I spend more time when I need to wear smart outfits.

'Do more time' is incorrect; use 'spend more time'. Also 'a smart outfits' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'smart outfits' (plural) or 'a smart outfit' (singular). Here plural fits context.

× On weekdays I would wear smart clothes for work such as a shirt and trousers since I want to look professional.

✓ On weekdays I wear smart clothes for work, such as a shirt and trousers, since I want to look professional.

'Would wear' suggests conditional or habitual in the past; use simple present 'wear' to describe regular habit. Added commas for clarity.

× But on weekday I dress more casually, for example jeans with uh T-shirts, so I can't comfortable.

✓ But on weekends I dress more casually, for example jeans with T-shirts, so I can be comfortable.

Context asks about weekdays vs weekends; student likely meant 'weekends' not 'weekday'. 'I can't comfortable' is ungrammatical; correct is 'I can be comfortable' or 'I feel comfortable'. Removed filler 'uh' and corrected plurality 'T-shirts'.

× I write well in earth tone or neutral colored because they feel calm and soothing to me and also easy to match with, uh, other items.

✓ I prefer earth tones or neutral colors because they feel calm and soothing to me and are also easy to match with other items.

'I write well in' is incorrect; intended verb is 'prefer' or 'like'. Use plural 'earth tones' and 'neutral colors'. 'Colored' used as adjective is wrong here. Also use 'are also easy to match with' for parallel structure. Removed filler 'uh'.