Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition; start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific examples with linking words. Correct small vocabulary errors (e.g., 'AT shirt' unclear) and reduce hesitations.

例: I usually dress according to the season. For example, in the rainy or cold season I wear warm clothes like a thick jacket and long-sleeve shirts, while in summer I prefer light, casual shirts and trousers.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence and give clear contrasting examples using linking words (e.g., 'however' or 'but'). Avoid unclear phrases and mispronounced items like 'lock slugs'.

例: It depends on the occasion: when I hang out with friends I prefer casual clothes like a long-sleeve T-shirt and trousers, but in professional settings I wear smart shirts and tailored trousers.

提案: Good concise answer; you can add a brief reason with linking words to make it slightly richer, and use slightly more descriptive vocabulary if possible.

例: Yes, I do, especially cotton T-shirts because they are breathable and comfortable, which makes them ideal for everyday wear.

提案: Give a clear direct answer then justify briefly with a reason and avoid filler phrases and repetition. Use linking words like 'because' to explain.

例: Not really — usually about five to ten minutes because I already plan outfits the night before, so choosing clothes in the morning is quick.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, avoid unclear words like 'formula tires', and use linking words ('whereas', 'while') to contrast weekdays and weekends. Be specific about clothing items.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear work clothes such as dress shirts and smart trousers for the office, whereas on weekends I prefer casual outfits like T-shirts and comfortable jeans.

提案: Good content and reasoning. Improve by using precise vocabulary (e.g., 'neutral tones', 'earth tones' instead of 'air tone') and avoid minor grammar issues. Add linking words to connect ideas.

例: I prefer neutral tones like white, black and gray because they're easy to style and match trousers. I also like earth tones, which I think suit my skin tone well.

× I typically choose the kind of clothes I wear depending on the season.

✓ I typically choose what clothes I wear depending on the season.

Use of 'the kind of clothes' is wordy and awkward; replace with 'what clothes' for natural present-tense expression. Maintain present simple for habitual action.

× So when it's raining or when it's in rainy season, I like to wear, I mean, I like to wear warm clothes such as thick jackets and then AT shirt and trousers for for the summer, I like to just wear casual, casual shirts and then some.

✓ So when it's raining or during the rainy season, I like to wear warm clothes such as thick jackets and shirts and trousers; in the summer I like to wear casual shirts and so on.

Incorrect phrase 'when it's in rainy season' should be 'during the rainy season'. Repetition and filler words removed. 'AT shirt' likely a typo; changed to 'shirts'. Maintain parallel structure and correct article use.

× It depends on the occasion.

✓ It depends on the occasion.

Sentence is grammatically correct; present simple third-person singular verb 'depends' is used correctly for a general statement. No change needed.

× When I just hang out with my friends, I do like to just wear casual clothes such as, you know, a long sleeve and a trouser.

✓ When I hang out with my friends, I like to wear casual clothes such as a long-sleeved shirt and trousers.

Remove unnecessary 'just' and 'do' for natural speech. 'long sleeve' should be 'long-sleeved shirt' and 'a trouser' should be plural 'trousers'. Maintain present simple for habitual action.

× And then when it's in a professional setting, I do like to wear a long sleeve in this lock slugs.

✓ And then when I'm in a professional setting, I like to wear a long-sleeved shirt and smart trousers.

'It's in a professional setting' is awkward; use 'I'm in a professional setting'. 'Long sleeve in this lock slugs' appears to be garbled; corrected to 'long-sleeved shirt and smart trousers' to convey intended meaning.

× I do, especially the cotton ones because it's breathable and simple.

✓ I do, especially cotton ones because they're breathable and simple.

Refers to 'T-shirts' (plural), so pronoun should be 'they're' (they are). 'it's' incorrectly treats shirts as singular.

× Maybe around 5 to 10 minutes. I don't think that's very long time. Maybe just, you know, normal time to pick up clothes, pick up clothes.

✓ Maybe around five to ten minutes. I don't think that's a very long time. Maybe just the normal time to pick out clothes.

Add article 'a' before 'very long time'. Use 'pick out clothes' rather than 'pick up clothes' for choosing garments. Spell out numbers for style and remove repetition.

× During the weekdays I tend to go to work so I pick out some formula tires and during the weekends when it's my day off I just want to make it.

✓ During the weekdays I tend to go to work so I pick out formal attire, and during the weekends when it's my day off I just want to relax.

'Some formula tires' is incorrect; corrected to 'formal attire'. 'I just want to make it' is unclear; replaced with 'I just want to relax' to fit context. Use 'and' to connect clauses.

× I mean I just want to look casual so just a normal T-shirt and then trousers would be very comfortable for me.

✓ I mean I just want to look casual, so a normal T-shirt and trousers are very comfortable for me.

Use present simple 'are' for plural subject 'T-shirt and trousers'. Remove unnecessary 'would' which suggests conditionality; present tense fits habitual preference.

× With regards to the color of my clothes, I like to pick out neutral colors such as white, black and Gray because it's easy to style and it goes perfectly with trousers.

✓ With regard to the color of my clothes, I like to choose neutral colors such as white, black and gray because they're easy to style and they go perfectly with trousers.

Use 'with regard to' (not 'regards to'). 'Pick out' changed to 'choose' for variety. 'Gray' should not be capitalized. Use plural pronouns 'they're' and 'they' to agree with plural 'colors'.

× I also like to pick out air tone colors because I think it fits with my skin color perfectly.

✓ I also like to choose earth-tone colors because I think they suit my skin tone perfectly.

'air tone' is incorrect; likely 'earth-tone'. 'fits with my skin color' should be 'suit my skin tone'. Use plural 'they' to agree with 'colors' and correct collocations.