Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, and give one or two specific examples. Use linking words if you add details.

例: I prefer modest clothing because of my faith. For example, I usually wear long skirts or trousers paired with long-sleeved shirts, especially when I attend church or formal family events.

提案: Give a direct answer, remove filler and repetition, and explain with a specific example. Use a linking word to contrast preferences for different situations.

例: I generally prefer comfortable, casual clothes, but it depends on the occasion. For instance, I wear jeans and a T-shirt for daily errands, whereas I choose a smart dress or blouse when I attend a wedding or work meeting.

提案: Keep it natural and avoid repetition. Provide one concise reason or specific situation where you wear T-shirts to make the answer richer.

例: Yes, I love wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable. I often wear them at home, when I run errands, and sometimes at casual church gatherings.

提案: Start with a clear direct response and then give a short specific detail with a linking word (e.g., "however"). Avoid wordy phrases.

例: Not usually. However, I take more time choosing clothes when I have a special occasion, like a wedding or an important meeting, so I look more carefully at styles and colours.

提案: Give a clear yes/no or direct statement, then explain with specific contrasting examples for weekdays vs weekends. Remove hesitations and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I do. On weekdays I usually wear practical, casual clothes for work or errands, such as trousers and a blouse. At weekends I prefer more relaxed outfits like T-shirts and jeans when I stay at home or meet friends.

提案: Answer directly, avoid repetition, and give a brief reason for your preferences. You can mention one specific example of an outfit in your favourite colour.

例: I like olive, black and white. Olive suits my skin tone and makes me look brighter, while black and white are classic and easy to match; for example, I often wear an olive blouse with black trousers.

× So as a Christian I love to wear more modest clothes like skirts and long skirts and long trousers and and top is like a shirt or a long long sleeves.

✓ As a Christian, I like to wear modest clothes such as skirts, long trousers, and tops like shirts or long-sleeved shirts.

The original sentence uses awkward conjunctions and repetition ('and and', 'long long') and incorrect noun phrase forms ('top is like a shirt or a long long sleeves'). This is a sentence structure problem and incorrect adjective/noun forms. Improve by using clearer conjunctions ('such as'), correct noun plurals ('tops'), and the correct adjective+noun order ('long-sleeved shirts').

× Well, I prefer to comfortable clothes, but it depends on what occasion I will attend.

✓ Well, I prefer comfortable clothes, but it depends on which occasion I will attend.

There is an incorrect infinitive construction ('prefer to comfortable') — after 'prefer' when followed by a noun use 'prefer + noun' or 'prefer to + verb'. Also use the relative determiner 'which' for specific occasions. Correct by saying 'prefer comfortable clothes' or 'prefer to wear comfortable clothes'.

× But when I will go to an occasion, I would probably probably wear clothes.

✓ But when I go to an event, I will probably wear clothes that suit the occasion.

Future reference should use simple present in time clauses ('when I go') and 'would probably probably' is repetitive and wrong modal use. Also 'an occasion' is awkward; 'event' fits better. Improve by using 'when I go' and 'will probably' or 'probably will', and add a clear object 'clothes that suit the occasion'.

× Yes, I do love wearing T-shirts. Actually I have I have a few of them.

✓ Yes, I love wearing T-shirts. Actually, I have a few of them.

Redundant auxiliary 'do' is acceptable but repetition 'I have I have' is an error (sentence structure/pronoun repetition). Remove duplicate words, and avoid unnecessary 'do' in affirmative statements. Add a comma after 'Actually' for clarity.

× Sometimes I wear them with outside or inside the house and often I wear them at church.

✓ Sometimes I wear them outside or inside the house, and often I wear them to church.

Use correct prepositions: 'outside' and 'inside' don't require 'with'. For places of worship use 'to church' or simply 'at church'—'to church' emphasizes going there. Also add a comma before 'and' to join clauses.

× Not that really, but when I have some occasion to go to then that will be the time that I will take some time in preparing my clothes or choosing what to wear.

✓ Not really, but when I have an occasion to go to, I take time to prepare my clothes and choose what to wear.

The sentence is wordy and uses awkward future phrasing ('that will be the time that I will take some time'). Simplify by using present simple for habitual actions ('I take time') and remove unnecessary repetition ('some time'). Place the preposition 'to' correctly after 'occasion to go to' or better: 'when I have an occasion'.

× Well, my style just depends when I have I have an errands to go to, an important errands to go to or my. My style is different when I'm just in house or in our store or I'm going elsewhere.

✓ Well, my style depends on whether I have errands to run or an important errand, and it is different when I'm at home, at our store, or going elsewhere.

Multiple errors: repeated phrases 'I have I have', incorrect plural 'an errands', missing preposition 'depends on', and incorrect place prepositions ('in house' -> 'at home'). Fix pronouns and determiners, use 'errands' plural without 'an', and use 'whether' to introduce alternatives.

× When I'm going elsewhere, my style isn't.

✓ When I'm going elsewhere, my style changes.

'My style isn't' is incomplete (sentence without a verb/predicate). Provide a full predicate to convey meaning, e.g., 'my style changes' or 'it's different'.

× Well, I just discovered that olive clothes colored clothes are suitable suitable for me because it it gives my skin tone lighter and also I love black color and white.

✓ I have discovered that olive-colored clothes suit me because they make my skin tone look lighter; I also like black and white.

Errors include repetition ('suitable suitable', 'it it'), incorrect adjective+noun order ('olive clothes colored clothes'), and wrong verb agreement ('it gives my skin tone lighter' should be 'they make my skin tone look lighter'). Use 'olive-colored' as a compound adjective, 'suit me' rather than 'are suitable for me' for conciseness, and 'black and white' without 'color' after each.