Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant with good reasons, but sometimes word choice and phrasing are slightly awkward (e.g., "prepare very casual clothes") and you repeat ideas. Make sentences more natural and concise, use a topic sentence then one or two supporting details, and avoid redundancy. Also vary vocabulary slightly.

例: I usually wear casual clothes like T-shirts and shorts. Because Bangkok is hot and humid, these lightweight outfits keep me cool and comfortable when I go out.

提案: Good structure and clear contrast between situations. Improve by tightening language, reducing filler phrases (e.g., "pretty much"), and using linking words like "but" or "however" more naturally. Add a brief specific example of smart attire to enrich the answer.

例: It depends on the occasion. If I’m with family or friends I prefer casual clothes, but for work, school or meeting elders I choose smart clothes, such as a button-down shirt and chinos, because they make me look more mature.

提案: Your enthusiasm is clear, but there are grammar errors (e.g., "allows" should be "allow", "comparing to" → "compared to") and some redundancy. Make the answer more concise (max 3–4 short sentences) and include one specific example of when you prefer a T-shirt.

例: Yes, I love T-shirts because they’re comfortable and allow me to move freely. Compared to button-up shirts, they’re quick to put on, so I usually wear a T-shirt when I’m running errands or meeting friends casually.

提案: Content is good but phrasing needs polishing (avoid words like "literally" when unnecessary). Remove repetition and use linking words such as "however" for contrast. Be specific about how long you spend or what you check when preparing.

例: It depends. For important meetings I take time to match my outfit and try several options to make sure everything fits well. However, when I go out with friends I usually grab the first comfortable outfit I see.

提案: The main idea is communicated but there are awkward phrases (e.g., "I have to look for more", "grab anything that I wish"). Make sentences concise and correct grammar; briefly describe what you wear on each day to add specificity.

例: Yes. On weekdays I dress more formally because universities have a dress code, so I usually wear a shirt and trousers. On weekends I wear casual clothes like jeans and T-shirts to relax.

提案: This answer is specific and gives an interesting reason, which is good. Improve fluency by removing fillers ("uh"), correcting small grammar issues ("dirt up" → "dirty" or "stain"), and tightening sentences to be more natural.

例: I prefer dark clothes because I have a pet tortoise. After it rains its legs get muddy, and when I pick it up it can stain my clothes, so dark colours hide the dirt better.

× I pretty much prepare very casual clothes, especially some T-shirt and shorts because of the weather as well.

✓ I usually wear very casual clothes, especially T-shirts and shorts because of the weather.

The original uses 'prepare' which is incorrect for describing what one wears. 'Prepare' is a verb meaning to make ready; the intended meaning is habitual wearing, so use simple present 'wear' and pluralize 'T-shirts'. Also 'pretty much' is informal; 'usually' is clearer. Correcting keeps present habitual tense.

× As you can see, the weather in Bangkok is really humid and hot and wearing these clothes really makes me comfortable.

✓ As you can see, the weather in Bangkok is very humid and hot, and wearing these clothes makes me comfortable.

'Really' is acceptable but repetitive; main issue is extra 'really' and redundant adverb placement. Also add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. Use 'very' for formality and remove second 'really' for clarity.

× Well it depends on the occasion.

✓ Well, it depends on the occasion.

Missing comma after 'Well' for natural speech punctuation. Tense is correct (simple present) because this is a general truth; no verb change needed.

× For example, if I'm going outside just with my family or friends then I pretty much prefer casual clothes.

✓ For example, if I'm going out with my family or friends, then I usually prefer casual clothes.

Use 'going out' (common collocation) rather than 'going outside'. 'Pretty much prefer' is informal and awkward; 'usually prefer' is clearer for habitual preference. Add comma after the clause.

× However, if I'm going for a work or meeting some elders or going to school, then I prefer smart clothes because they make me look mature.

✓ However, if I'm going to work, meeting elders, or going to school, then I prefer smart clothes because they make me look more mature.

'Going for a work' is incorrect; use 'going to work'. 'Meeting some elders' is better as 'meeting elders' or 'meeting older people'. 'More mature' is the correct comparative form. Parallel structure improved by using gerunds consistently.

× Yes I love wearing T-shirts, they are so comfortable and casual and allows me to move freely easily and it saves lots of time comparing to a normal shirt because they have buttons whereas T-shirt doesn't.

✓ Yes, I love wearing T-shirts; they are so comfortable and casual and allow me to move freely, and they save a lot of time compared to a normal shirt because shirts have buttons whereas T-shirts don't.

Subject-verb agreement: plural 'T-shirts' requires plural verb 'allow', not 'allows'. Use 'they' consistently. 'It saves' should be 'they save'. Use 'a lot of' instead of 'lots of' for more formal phrasing. 'Comparing to' should be 'compared to'. Also pluralize 'shirt' to 'shirts' and 'T-shirt' to 'T-shirts' for consistency.

× So I would say for a quick go then T-shirt of course.

✓ So I would say for a quick trip, a T-shirt, of course.

Original is informal and ungrammatical. 'Quick go' is not a natural noun phrase; 'quick trip' or 'quick outing' works. Add articles and commas for clarity.

× If I'm meeting someone really important and I want to make a good impression, then I would literally match all of my clothes I would try on and check if that really fits me well.

✓ If I'm meeting someone important and I want to make a good impression, I will try on and match all my clothes to see if they fit me well.

Mixing conditional/modal forms causes tense inconsistency. Use 'I will' or simple present in condition with present continuous; here future 'I will try on' is appropriate. Remove unnecessary 'literally'. Use plural 'they fit' to agree with 'clothes'.

× But if I'm just going out with my friends, I'm meeting regular people, then I would just pick on anything that's hanging out there.

✓ But if I'm just going out with my friends and meeting ordinary people, then I would just pick anything that's hanging there.

'Pick on' means to bully someone; correct phrasal verb is 'pick' or 'pick out'. 'Hanging out there' is colloquial and redundant; 'hanging there' or 'on the rack' is clearer. 'Regular people' better phrased as 'ordinary people'.

× Yes, I definitely wear something different for weekdays and weekends.

✓ Yes, I definitely wear different clothes on weekdays and weekends.

'Something different' is vague and less natural than 'different clothes'. Preposition 'on' is used with days (on weekdays), so change 'for weekdays' to 'on weekdays'.

× This is because on weekdays I have to visit universities and I have to look for more because there is a dress code.

✓ This is because on weekdays I have to go to university and dress more formally because there is a dress code.

'Visit universities' is odd for attending; 'go to university' is natural. 'Look for more' is ungrammatical; intended meaning is 'dress more formally'. Rearranged for clarity.

× Whereas on weekends I can grab anything that I wish to wear which allows me to be casual whereas on the weekdays I have to be formal.

✓ On weekends I can grab anything I want to wear, which allows me to be casual, whereas on weekdays I have to be formal.

Avoid repeating 'whereas' twice; combine sentences and use commas for clarity. 'I wish to wear' is formal; 'I want to wear' is more natural.

× I prefer wearing dark clothes because I have a tortoise and especially when it rains, I have to grab him and bring him inside of the home.

✓ I prefer wearing dark clothes because I have a tortoise, and especially when it rains, I have to grab him and bring him inside the house.

'Bring him inside of the home' is unidiomatic. Use 'inside the house'. Comma needed before 'and' joining clauses.

× His legs and arms are usually dirty with the mud since it's on the land.

✓ His legs and arms are usually dirty with mud because he is on the ground.

'The mud' and 'the land' are unnatural here. Use 'mud' without article. 'Since it's on the land' is unclear; clarify that the tortoise is on the ground. Also avoid 'arms' for a tortoise; 'legs' and 'shell' might be better, but kept structure minimal.

× So when I grab him, his hands usually, uh, dirt up my clothes so I have to wear dark clothes.

✓ So when I grab him, he usually dirties my clothes, so I have to wear dark clothes.

'His hands usually, uh, dirt up my clothes' is colloquial and word order is awkward. Use 'he usually dirties my clothes' or 'his legs usually dirty my clothes' if referring to tortoise. 'Dirties' is clearer and more natural than 'dirt up'.