Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar (remove extra articles, fix noun forms), avoid hesitation and redundancy, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details with linking words. Use specific vocabulary (e.g., jeans, T-shirt, breathable fabrics) and avoid fillers.

例: I prefer casual clothes such as jeans and a T‑shirt because they are comfortable and breathable. For example, when I have a long day of errands or work, these clothes help me stay relaxed and confident.

提案: Answer directly, finish your thought, and reduce hesitations. Use linking words (because, however) and concrete reasons. Fix grammar (e.g., "give me confidence", "smart clothes may not be suitable") and avoid repeating phrases.

例: I prefer comfortable casual clothes because they give me confidence and help me stay relaxed. However, I will choose smart clothes for formal events like interviews or weddings.

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Use precise expressions ("T‑shirts are my go‑to"), give one clear reason and a brief example. Correct small errors ("a T‑shirt", not "AT shirt").

例: Yes, T‑shirts are my go‑to outfit when I hang out with friends because they are comfortable and easy to style. For instance, I often pair a plain T‑shirt with jeans for casual outings.

提案: Give a focused answer with a clear reason and one brief example. Eliminate repetition and hesitations. Correct grammar ("I take a lot of time", "choose my outfit"). Finish the sentence and add a simple consequence or solution.

例: Yes, I usually take a long time to choose my outfit because I want to look appropriate for the occasion. For example, before going to a party I may try several combinations to feel confident.

提案: Structure the answer: topic sentence plus a specific contrast—weekday vs weekend—with linking words (for example, whereas, while). Reduce hesitations and be specific about examples (workwear vs casual wear).

例: Yes. On weekdays I usually wear smart‑casual clothes for work, whereas at the weekend I prefer more relaxed outfits like jeans and hoodies because I value comfort during free time.

提案: Give a clear, concise statement and one or two specific reasons. Avoid repetition and hesitation. Use precise language ("black matches everything", "easy to style"). Provide a short example of how you wear black.

例: My favourite colour is black because it matches almost any outfit and is easy to style. For example, I often wear a black jacket over different shirts since it goes well with most colours.

× I prefer wearing a casual clothes like jeans and AT shirt, which will give me a confidence throughout the day because that's very comfortable and breathable to work on a daily basis.

✓ I prefer wearing casual clothes like jeans and a T-shirt, which give me confidence throughout the day because they are very comfortable and breathable for daily work.

The noun phrase 'a casual clothes' mixes singular article with plural noun; use 'casual clothes' (no article) or 'a casual outfit'. 'AT shirt' likely intended 'a T-shirt' and needs article 'a'. 'a confidence' is incorrect; 'confidence' is uncountable here so use without article. Pronouns and verbs must agree: 'which will give me' -> 'which give me' to match plural 'clothes', and 'that's very comfortable' -> 'they are very comfortable' to refer to plural clothes; 'to work on a daily basis' is unnatural, use 'for daily work'.

× I prefer to wear comfortable casual clothes because that will give naturally, that will be giving us a confident and also if we are in a position, uh, to be in a very stressful, uh, situation, wearing a very smart clothes will not always suit our, uh, situation.

✓ I prefer to wear comfortable casual clothes because they naturally give us confidence, and if we are in a very stressful situation, wearing very smart clothes will not always suit us.

Use present simple 'give' for general truth rather than future 'will give'. 'that will be giving us a confident' is incorrect: use 'they give us confidence' (uncountable). 'wearing a very smart clothes' mixes article with plural; use 'wearing very smart clothes' or 'wearing a very smart outfit'. 'suit our situation' is awkward; 'suit us' is clearer.

× I love wearing T-shirt because that's, that will be my go to outfit, Uh, if I am hanging out with my friends because, uh, we don't need to worry about, uh, our dress at that time in the wardrobe.

✓ I love wearing T-shirts because they're my go-to outfit when I'm hanging out with friends, since we don't need to worry about our clothes then.

Use plural 'T-shirts' for general preference. 'that's, that will be my go to outfit' should be 'they're my go-to outfit' to match plural and present habit. 'our dress' is countable and awkward here; use 'our clothes'.

× I, I don't need to fix my wardrobe because I feel like taking AT shirt and going out with my friends.

✓ I don't need to fix my wardrobe because I feel like taking a T-shirt and going out with my friends.

Use article 'a' with singular countable noun 'T-shirt' and correct spelling 'T-shirt'. 'fix my wardrobe' is informal but acceptable; main error was article and noun form.

× Yes, I am a person who take a lot of time to decide my outfit of that day.

✓ Yes, I am a person who takes a lot of time to decide my outfit for the day.

Subject-verb agreement with relative clause: 'who' refers to 'person' (singular) so verb should be 'takes' not 'take'. Use 'for the day' instead of 'of that day' for natural phrasing.

× If I am not ready to go out before taking the proper outfit, then I'll not go out.

✓ If I am not ready to go out because I haven't chosen the proper outfit, then I won't go out.

'I'll not go out' is grammatically possible but unnatural; use 'I won't go out'. Also 'before taking the proper outfit' is awkward; rephrase to 'because I haven't chosen the proper outfit' to convey intended meaning. Maintain conditional future use 'won't'.

× I, I, I spend a lot of time in choosing my outfits.

✓ I spend a lot of time choosing my outfits.

'in choosing' is unnecessary; use the gerund directly 'spend time choosing'. Remove repeated filler 'I, I, I'.

× Yes, I do love to try different clothes on different days because it completely depends on the occasion uh, that I'm going to be part of.

✓ Yes, I love trying different clothes on different days because it completely depends on the occasion I'll be part of.

Use gerund 'trying' or 'to try' consistently; 'I do love to try' is acceptable but 'I love trying' is more natural. 'going to be part of' should be 'I'll be part of' for spoken future intention; both are related but aligning tense improves clarity.

× So I will be taking uh, accordingly, uh, to my preferences in that particular occasion and the most comfortable uh, fitting, uh, needed for that day.

✓ So I will dress according to my preferences for that particular occasion and choose the most comfortable fit needed for the day.

'taking accordingly to' is incorrect preposition use; use 'according to'. 'in that particular occasion' should be 'for that particular occasion'. 'the most comfortable fitting' is awkward; use 'most comfortable fit' or 'comfortable clothing' and 'choose' clarifies action.

× My favorite color is black and I feel like black is the color, uh, which uh, goes with every fits.

✓ My favorite color is black and I feel black is a color that goes with every outfit.

'goes with every fits' mixes plural noun 'fits' with singular determiner; 'every' should be followed by singular noun like 'outfit'. Also say 'a color that' or 'the color that' for natural phrasing.

× So I will be using black color outfits because it goes with everything because style it easily with any other dresses and uh, especially a black thing.

✓ So I wear black outfits because they go with everything and are easy to style with other clothes, especially black items.

Pronoun agreement: 'black color outfits' is awkward — use 'black outfits'. 'it goes with everything' should be 'they go with everything' to agree with plural 'outfits'. 'style it easily' incorrectly uses 'it'; use 'are easy to style' and 'other dresses' -> 'other clothes'.