Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more concise and direct. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrases like "personality impact" and reduce repetition.

例: I like to wear comfortable clothes that reflect my personality. For example, I often choose soft cotton shirts and relaxed jeans because they let me move freely and feel confident when I meet people.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repeating the same idea. Give a short reason and one specific example of when you choose comfortable clothes to make it concrete.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes rather than smart outfits because I value ease of movement. For instance, I usually wear sneakers and a hoodie when studying or meeting friends.

提案: Correct language errors and be more fluent. Replace fillers like "uh" and incorrect phrasing. Give a quick example of favourite types of T-shirts to add specificity.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they make me feel relaxed and more natural around others. For example, I often wear plain or graphic cotton T-shirts when I go to classes or casual meetups.

提案: Finish your answer clearly and avoid hesitations. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give two contrasting examples (casual vs formal situations) using linking words like "however" or "but".

例: It depends on the occasion. For casual hangouts or family gatherings I usually pick clothes quickly, but for formal events or interviews I spend more time planning my outfit and matching accessories.

提案: Make the structure clearer: a topic sentence, then a brief reason and a specific example. Remove repeated words and unnecessary fillers.

例: Yes. On weekdays I wear simple, practical clothes because I have classes and little time in the morning. On weekends I choose more varied outfits, like a nicer shirt or jacket, because I might go out with friends.

提案: Avoid vague claims and give concrete examples of colours and when you wear them. Reduce repetition and correct awkward expressions like "enhancement to 1's personality."

例: I like vibrant colours such as red, teal and mustard because they make me feel more confident. For example, I wear a bright jacket when I want to stand out at a party or presentation.

× Well, I believe that clothing gives a person external appearance and also a personality impact on another person.

✓ Well, I believe that clothing gives a person an external appearance and also has a personality impact on others.

Missing article before 'external appearance' and awkward verb phrase 'personality impact on another person'. Use 'an external appearance' (article for singular countable noun) and 'has a personality impact on others' to make the sentence natural and grammatically correct. Suggestion: add appropriate articles and use 'has' with 'impact' and 'others' for general meaning.

× So I prefer wearing comfortable clothes that actually reflect my personality.

✓ So I prefer to wear comfortable clothes that actually reflect my personality.

Mix of 'prefer wearing' is acceptable but 'prefer to wear' is more natural here. This is a present preference; use infinitive 'to wear' after 'prefer' for clarity. Suggestion: use 'prefer to' + base verb to state habitual preferences.

× Well honestly, yes I do prefer wearing comfortable clothes because they actually reflect my personality and how another person perceives my personality.

✓ Well, honestly, yes I prefer to wear comfortable clothes because they reflect my personality and how others perceive it.

Redundant 'do' and 'wearing' form; use 'prefer to wear' for a habitual present preference. Replace 'another person perceives my personality' with 'others perceive it' to avoid repetition and make subject plural for generalization. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary auxiliaries and repeat words; use pronouns to refer back.

× Yes, I do like wearing T-shirts a lot because they actually prefer, uh, give me a sense of relaxment and help me to be natural around people.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts a lot because they give me a sense of relaxation and help me to be natural around people.

Remove filler 'do' unless emphasizing; 'prefer' is incorrectly placed (T-shirts cannot prefer). 'Relaxment' is nonstandard — correct form is 'relaxation'. Also 'help me to be' can be 'help me be' for conciseness. Suggestion: eliminate misplaced words and use standard noun forms.

× Honestly speaking, it actually depends on what kind of occasion I'm wearing those clothes to.

✓ Honestly speaking, it actually depends on the kind of occasion I'm dressing for.

Awkward structure 'occasion I'm wearing those clothes to' — better phrased as 'occasion I'm dressing for' or 'occasion the clothes are for'. This clarifies subject and verb and avoids ending with a preposition awkwardly. Suggestion: use 'dress for' or 'clothes are for' for clarity.

× So whenever I get to an A a hangout with my friends or a simple occasion or get together with my family, I do not take a lot of time to actually, uh, choose clothes.

✓ So whenever I go to a hangout with my friends or a simple family get-together, I do not take much time to choose clothes.

'Get to an A a hangout' is ungrammatical and redundant; use 'go to a hangout'. 'Get together' should be 'get-together' as a noun. 'Do not take a lot of time to actually, uh, choose clothes' is wordy — 'do not take much time to choose clothes' is concise. Suggestion: remove fillers, correct collocations, and use hyphen for 'get-together'.

× But sometimes when it is.

✓ But sometimes I do take more time when the occasion is special.

Fragment 'But sometimes when it is.' is incomplete. Provide a complete clause specifying what 'it' refers to (the occasion). Suggestion: finish the thought by stating the condition that requires more time, e.g. 'when the occasion is special'.

× Honestly speaking as I am a student, I do not give a lot of time to choosing clothes during weekdays.

✓ Honestly, as I am a student, I do not spend much time choosing clothes on weekdays.

'Give a lot of time to choosing clothes' is awkward; use 'spend much time choosing clothes'. Use 'on weekdays' instead of 'during weekdays' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'spend time' collocation and simplify adverbial phrases.

× But yes I do take a take a bit of time for choosing my outfit during weekends.

✓ But yes, I do take a bit of time to choose my outfit on weekends.

Duplicate 'take a' is an error. Use 'take a bit of time to choose' and 'on weekends' is more natural than 'during weekends'. Suggestion: remove duplication and use correct infinitive form 'to choose'.

× Honestly, I do wear a lot of colors, but my personal favorite has to be the vibrant ones because I believe that vibrant colours actually give a lot of enhancement to 1's personality and they actually provide a person with a lot of confidence in it.

✓ Honestly, I wear a lot of colors, but my personal favorites are the vibrant ones because I believe vibrant colors enhance a person's personality and give them confidence.

Use plural 'favorites' to match 'vibrant ones'. Replace 'give a lot of enhancement to 1's personality' (typo '1's') with 'enhance a person's personality'. Avoid repeating 'actually' and 'in it'. Use 'give them confidence' rather than 'provide a person with a lot of confidence in it'. Suggestion: correct typos, use natural verbs like 'enhance', and use consistent plural forms and pronouns.