Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition of words like "put on" and reduce redundancy about religion and modesty by combining ideas. Use linking words like "because" or "so" to show reason.

例: I prefer wearing comfortable, modest clothes. As a Muslim woman, I choose outfits that cover my body and allow me to move easily, such as loose dresses or long tunics, because they respect my beliefs and suit my daily activities.

提案: Give a direct answer first, then one clear reason with a concrete example. Remove filler phrases like "if that makes sense" and "you know." Keep to two or three sentences max.

例: I prefer smart clothes that are also comfortable. For example, I wear tailored blouses and long skirts that look professional but are made from breathable fabric, because I believe a neat appearance reflects my seriousness at work.

提案: Answer directly and correct grammar and vocabulary. Explain briefly why, with a specific reason or example. Avoid repeated negations and incorrect phrasing.

例: No, I usually avoid T-shirts because I find them unsuitable for my modest dress style and sometimes uncomfortable around the neckline; I prefer tops with higher necklines and looser fits.

提案: Provide a clear, coherent answer: state how much time you spend, then give one precise reason with linking words. Correct vague phrases like "my active like how active I am."

例: Yes, I spend a little time each morning choosing clothes because I think my appearance affects my confidence and energy; for instance, picking a neat outfit helps me feel more prepared for work.

提案: Answer directly and provide one clear comparison with specific examples. Avoid sentence fragments and awkward endings like "so thereby I'll." Use linking words like "whereas" or "while."

例: Yes. For example, I wear formal dresses and blouses to work, whereas on weekends I choose loose jeans and long-sleeved tunics so I can relax comfortably at home.

提案: This answer misunderstands the question (asks about colour but describes fabric). Address the question directly by naming colours, then optionally add fabric preference as supporting detail. Keep sentences short and precise.

例: I prefer neutral colours like navy, beige and black because they are versatile. I also choose breathable fabrics such as linen in those colours to stay comfortable.

× This decision has been influenced by my religion, partially because I am a Muslim and it is always ideal for a woman to put on clothes that are comfortable and modest.

✓ This decision has been influenced by my religion, partially because I am a Muslim and it is always ideal for a woman to wear clothes that are comfortable and modest.

The verb 'put on' is a phrasal verb used for the act of dressing at a moment (putting on a shirt). In general statements about clothing preferences, the correct verb is 'wear'. Use 'wear' for habitual or general situations. Suggestion: replace 'put on' with 'wear' in general statements.

× That is why I prefer to put on clothes that cover my body.

✓ That is why I prefer to wear clothes that cover my body.

Same issue as above: use 'wear' for general habits. 'Prefer to put on' sounds like a single action; 'prefer to wear' correctly expresses habitual preference.

× I like to wear smart clothes that are modest and comfortable at the same time, if that makes sense, though.

✓ I like to wear smart clothes that are modest and comfortable at the same time, if that makes sense.

The original sentence is acceptable but ends awkwardly with both 'if that makes sense' and 'though'; 'though' is redundant. Remove 'though' to maintain clear present-tense statement. Suggestion: avoid redundant discourse markers.

× I believe that your appearance says a lot about you as a person.

✓ I believe that your appearance says a lot about you as a person.

No change required; sentence is correct. Included to show subject 'appearance' correctly agrees with 'says'.

× So I like to put on smart clothes, so I'm always active.

✓ So I like to wear smart clothes, so I'm always active.

Replace 'put on' with 'wear' for habitual action. Also the link between wearing smart clothes and being 'always active' is unclear but grammatically 'wear' is the correct verb.

× No, I don't like wearing put wearing T-shirt because it has a bit of an uncomfortable feeling for me, so that's why I don't put on shirts.

✓ No, I don't like wearing T-shirts because they are a bit uncomfortable for me, so I don't wear them.

Multiple issues: 'put wearing' is wrong word order; use 'wearing'. 'T-shirt' should be plural 'T-shirts' when speaking generally. 'It has a bit of an uncomfortable feeling' is unnatural; use 'they are a bit uncomfortable for me'. Pronoun 'they' agrees with plural. Finally replace 'put on shirts' with 'wear them'.

× Booths, yes, I spend a little time picking up what I wear for the day because I believe that my appearance mostly influence my active like how active I am.

✓ Boths, yes, I spend a little time picking out what I wear for the day because I believe that my appearance mostly influences how active I am.

Multiple errors: likely meant 'Both, yes' or 'Boths' is incorrect—should be 'Both, yes' or simply 'Yes'. 'Picking up' is wrong; use 'picking out' to choose clothes. 'Appearance mostly influence' has subject-verb agreement error; change to 'influences'. 'My active like how active I am' is ungrammatical; correct to 'how active I am.' Suggestion: simplify to 'Yes, I spend a little time picking out what I wear for the day because I believe my appearance mostly influences how active I am.'

× Yes, I do. For instance, a clothing out including I'll put on to work is different from what I'll put on when I'm at home during the weekends because I like to be comfortable so thereby I'll.

✓ Yes, I do. For instance, the clothes I wear to work are different from what I wear at home during the weekend because I like to be comfortable.

Original has word-order and fragment issues: 'a clothing out including I'll put on to work' is ungrammatical—replace with 'the clothes I wear to work'. 'I'll put on when I'm at home during the weekends' should be 'what I wear at home during the weekend'. Remove 'so thereby I'll' which is an incomplete fragment. Use plural 'clothes' and consistent present simple for habitual actions.

× I like breathable clothings such as linen and some soft cutting clothings that are very breathable and like I said, comfortable.

✓ I like breathable clothing such as linen and some soft cotton fabrics that are very breathable and, as I said, comfortable.

'Clothings' is not a correct plural; use 'clothing'. 'Soft cutting clothings' is incorrect; likely meant 'soft cotton fabrics'. Repetition of 'breathable' is redundant but acceptable; adjust punctuation and word choice for clarity. Use 'as I said' rather than 'like I said' for slightly more formal speech.