Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and precise: use correct collocations (e.g., "corporate wear" or "formal clothes") and avoid vague phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Control length to under five sentences.

例: I prefer wearing formal or corporate clothes because they fit me well and look professional. For everyday use I also like jeans, since they are durable and easy to style. For instance, I often pair dark jeans with a blazer when I want to look smart but still comfortable.

提案: Make the response concise and natural: open with a clear preference, then give a logical reason and one specific example. Use correct expressions (e.g., "feel at ease" not "feel ease") and linking words like "because" or "so" to connect ideas.

例: I prefer wearing casual clothes because they are more comfortable for everyday activities. For example, I usually choose sneakers and a T-shirt when I go to parties or meet friends, because I can move around and relax easily.

提案: Improve clarity and coherence: give a clear reason and a specific, well-structured example. Correct grammar and use linking words (e.g., "because", "so"). Avoid fragmented sentences and repetition.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and versatile. For example, I often borrow my brother's T-shirts when we hang out; he has bright designs that I like, so they became my favorites too.

提案: Be concise and structured: state whether you spend time choosing clothes, then give specific reasons and an example. Fix grammar ("putting on fine clothes", "I learned from my mother"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example."

例: Yes, I often spend time choosing clothes because I enjoy dressing well and it makes me feel confident. For example, I learned styling tips from my mother, so I try different outfits until I find one that suits the occasion.

× I love corporate wares because it gives a very good fitting and I also love jeans.

✓ I love corporate wear because it gives a very good fit, and I also love jeans.

Error type maps to Article errors/word choice (22). 'Wares' is incorrect for clothing; 'wear' or 'clothes' is correct. 'Gives a very good fitting' uses wrong noun form; 'fit' is correct. Also plural agreement: 'it gives' is acceptable if 'corporate wear' treated as uncountable. Suggest using 'corporate wear' and 'fit' for natural phrasing.

× I like the fact that it's strong and it looks beautiful for me.

✓ I like the fact that it's durable, and it looks attractive to me.

Error type maps to Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs/pronouns (12,13). 'Strong' is odd for clothes; 'durable' is more natural. 'Looks beautiful for me' is unidiomatic; use 'looks attractive to me' or 'I find it attractive.' Replace 'it's' ambiguity with clear adjective.

× I prefer to wear casual clothes because it's more comfortable for everyday use.

✓ I prefer to wear casual clothes because they are more comfortable for everyday use.

Error type 27. 'Casual clothes' is plural, so the pronoun and verb should be plural: 'they are' not 'it's more.' Use plural agreement for pronoun referring to 'clothes.'

× I often love to wear them when I go out for parties.

✓ I often like to wear them when I go out to parties.

Error type 6/8. 'Love' is possible but collocationally odd with 'often'; 'like' fits better. 'Go out for parties' is slightly off; 'go out to parties' or 'go to parties' is natural. Also avoid repeating 'to wear them' which is fine but 'like to wear them' is smoother.

× It makes me feel ease and at rest.

✓ It makes me feel at ease and relaxed.

Error type 13/20. 'Feel ease' is incorrect; idiomatic expression is 'feel at ease.' 'At rest' is unnatural here; 'relaxed' is better. Use adverb/adjective pair 'at ease and relaxed.'

× I started liking T-shirts because my brother has lovely T-shirts.

✓ I started liking T-shirts because my brother had lovely T-shirts.

Error type 5/6. If referring to when the speaker developed the preference in the past, the reason clause should use past tense 'had.' If the brother still has them and that caused the liking now, present 'has' could be kept; choose tense according to context. Suggest matching tenses: 'started liking' (past) -> 'had.'

× Usually wear out and then I take one of his and I'll wear them out.

✓ Usually his T-shirts wear out, so I take one of them and wear it.

Error type 26. Original sentence fragments and pronoun mismatch ('one of his' vs 'them') cause confusion. Clarify subject and object, use consistent singular/plural: 'one of them' and 'wear it.' Remove 'I'll' if describing habitual action: use simple present 'I wear it.'

× Yes, I spend a lot of time changing clothes because I love wearing clothes.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I love wearing them.

Error type 27/11. 'Changing clothes' suggests switching outfits repeatedly; context likely means 'choosing clothes.' Also avoid repetition 'wearing clothes' by using pronoun 'them.' Use 'choosing' not 'changing' to match question about time spent selecting clothes.

× It gives me joy whenever I'm putting on a fine clothes.

✓ It gives me joy whenever I'm putting on fine clothes.

Error type 22/1. 'A fine clothes' is incorrect because 'clothes' is plural and does not take 'a.' Remove 'a' or change to singular 'a fine garment' or 'a fine outfit.' Use plural agreement: 'putting on fine clothes.'

× And I got to learn how to dress for my mother.

✓ And I learned how to dress from my mother.

Error type 5/12. 'I got to learn' is colloquial and awkward here; 'I learned' is clearer. 'Dress for my mother' implies dressing on her behalf; use 'from my mother' to indicate learning from her. Match past tense 'learned.'