Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and use a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Reduce redundancy (e.g., "comfortable, light clothes" and "good for summers" overlap). Use a linking word to connect preference and reason.

例: I prefer lightweight, comfortable clothes, especially in summer. For example, I often choose cotton shirts in bright colors because they keep me cool and suit my skin tone.

提案: Start with a direct statement, avoid fillers ("Uh") and unclear phrases like "look good in my personality." Give one clear reason and a brief example, using a linking word to connect ideas.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes because they reflect my relaxed personality. For instance, I feel more confident and natural in jeans and a T-shirt when meeting friends.

提案: Avoid repetition ("comfortable" repeated, "them them"). Use one concise reason and a supporting detail with a linking word. Correct grammar: subject-verb agreement and clearer phrasing.

例: Yes, I like wearing T-shirts because they are comfortable and let me move freely. For example, I often wear a cotton T-shirt when I'm walking or doing casual activities.

提案: Give a clearer reason and avoid vague or incomplete phrases ("would take"). Use one linking word to explain why and add a specific example of your decision process to make it concrete.

例: Yes, I spend a long time choosing clothes because I worry about whether they suit me. For example, I compare two outfits and think about comfort and color for several minutes before deciding.

× I like to wear more comfortable, light clothes which are good for summers, and I like bright colors because I think that suits my body color well.

✓ I like to wear more comfortable, light clothes which are good for summer, and I like bright colors because I think they suit my skin tone.

The original sentence contains pronoun and noun number issues. 'suits my body color' uses 'suits' with a singular subject but refers to 'bright colors' (plural), so the pronoun and verb should agree: use 'they suit'. Also 'body color' is non-idiomatic; 'skin tone' is a more natural collocation. 'Summers' should be singular ('summer') when referring to the season generally. Suggestion: ensure pronouns match their antecedents in number and use idiomatic noun phrases. Grammar problem type ID:12

× I prefer to wear more comfortable clothes. Uh, in that I will look good in my personality, I will be more perfectly showcased.

✓ I prefer to wear more comfortable clothes. In that, I will look better in my personality; I will be showcased more perfectly.

The original has awkward phrasing and slight word order problems affecting grammar. 'In that I will look good in my personality' is unidiomatic; 'look better in my personality' conveys comparative intent. 'I will be more perfectly showcased' places 'more' before 'perfectly', which is redundant and awkward. Reordering improves clarity. Suggestion: simplify sentences and use natural collocations ('look better', 'be showcased') and correct adverb placement. Grammar problem type ID:27

× Yes, I like wearing T-shirts a lot because that make me feel comfortable and I think that these are more comfortable type of clothes and I can wear them them, you know, most of the time because in that I can move freely.

✓ Yes, I like wearing T-shirts a lot because they make me feel comfortable, and I think they are a more comfortable type of clothing that I can wear most of the time since I can move freely in them.

Multiple errors: 'that make' should be 'they make' to match plural 'T-shirts' (third person plural). 'These are more comfortable type of clothes' is ungrammatical: use 'they are a more comfortable type of clothing' or 'they are more comfortable clothes'. Duplicate 'them them' removed. 'Because in that I can move freely' is unidiomatic; use 'since I can move freely in them.' Suggestion: ensure subject-pronoun agreement (plural subject → plural pronoun and plural verb), avoid duplicate words, and use idiomatic prepositional phrases. Grammar problem type ID:2

× Yes, I spend a lot of time in choosing clothes because I am so confused.

✓ Yes, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because I get so confused.

The verb 'spend time' is followed directly by a gerund without the preposition 'in' in this context, so 'spend a lot of time choosing' is correct. Also 'I am so confused' is acceptable but 'I get so confused' is more natural when describing a repeated reaction. Suggestion: omit unnecessary prepositions after 'spend time' and use natural tense/aspect for habitual reactions. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Like I cannot choose the options instantly because of my choices and I usually pick the clothes that I feel would be more comfortable and would take.

✓ I cannot choose immediately because I have many options, and I usually pick the clothes that I feel will be more comfortable and suit me.

The original sentence has structural and word choice problems: 'because of my choices' is redundant and unclear, 'instantly' is less natural than 'immediately', and the phrase 'would take' is incomplete and ungrammatical. Rewriting clarifies meaning: explain that many options make instant decisions difficult, and finish with a clear verb like 'suit me.' Suggestion: simplify clauses, avoid redundancy, and complete verb phrases. Grammar problem type ID:26