Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Reduce hesitations and redundancy; give a clear topic sentence then one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., "but," "however," "for example") and avoid filler words like 'uh'. Aim for 2–3 sentences and include a specific example of an outfit.

例: I usually wear simple, casual clothes because they make me comfortable. However, for work or business trips I choose formal attire, such as a tailored suit and a button-down shirt, because it looks professional.

提案: Be concise and structure the answer: give a clear preference then briefly explain reasons using linking words (e.g., "because," "however,"). Avoid repeating the same idea twice. Provide one concrete example to support your view.

例: I prefer comfortable, casual clothes for daily life because they help me relax and move freely. However, I also wear smart clothes for formal events since a neat blazer and dress trousers make me appear more professional.

提案: Answer directly and give a specific reason and example. Avoid vague or unclear vocabulary (e.g., 'silver camis') and remove filler sounds. Keep to 1–2 clear sentences with a concrete alternative you prefer.

例: Not really — I find T-shirts uncomfortable because they can be too loose or casual. I prefer lightweight blouses or polo shirts, which feel neater and more comfortable for daily wear.

提案: Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific situations and a reason. Use linking words like "especially" and avoid repetition. Mention a concrete example of what you consider when choosing an outfit (color, fit, theme).

例: Yes, I do, especially for special occasions like weddings or birthdays. For those events I spend time choosing an elegant dress or suit, considering the dress code, color and how formal the venue is.

× I prefer to wear simple and casual clothes, uh, which uh, makes me comfortable And, uh, I also prefer formal attire for work or business trips.

✓ I prefer to wear simple and casual clothes, which make me comfortable, and I also prefer formal attire for work or business trips.

Subject 'clothes' is plural, so the relative clause must use plural verb 'make' (subject-verb agreement). Also 'And' should be connected with a comma and conjunction 'and' in the same sentence for fluency. Suggestion: identify the main subject and ensure verb number matches; combine short clauses with commas and conjunctions for smoother speech.

× Uh, for example, when I, uh, when I go to, uh, the go to the office, I, uh, love to wear or official clothes.

✓ For example, when I go to the office, I love to wear formal clothes.

The phrase had redundant words ('the go to the office') and incorrect article/word choice ('or official clothes'). Use 'the office' and 'formal clothes' (not 'official') for natural collocation. Suggestion: remove fillers and redundancies and choose the collocation 'formal clothes'.

× I don't like wearing T-shirt because I think, uh, I, I'm not comfortable with T-shirts, uh, but I like wearing uh, casual clothes, uh, such as a silver camis, uh, I think it uh, looks more uh, uh, elegant and comfortable.

✓ I don't like wearing T-shirts because I am not comfortable in them, but I like casual clothes such as a silver camisole because I think they look more elegant and comfortable.

Use plural 'T-shirts' or 'a T-shirt' with correct article; 'comfortable with' should be 'comfortable in' and refer back with 'them' for plural. 'Camis' is colloquial/incorrect; use 'camisole'. Pronoun 'they' matches plural 'casual clothes'. Also avoid run-on sentence by using conjunctions and commas. Suggestion: use correct plurality, prepositions, and appropriate noun forms; break long sentences into clearer clauses.

× Uh, yeah, definitely, especially on occasion, uh, if, uh, it is a birthday or wedding, uh, I definitely, uh, spend a lot of time choosing clothes, uh, because uh, it's a special, uh, special party.

✓ Yes, definitely, especially on occasions like birthdays or weddings, I spend a lot of time choosing clothes because they are special events.

Use plural 'occasions' and parallel nouns 'birthdays or weddings'. 'A birthday or wedding' as countable events should be plural when generalizing. 'Special party' is awkward; use 'special events'. Suggestion: use plurals when speaking about events in general and choose consistent vocabulary ('events' instead of repeating 'special').

× So definitely the address, uh, will be more elegant.

✓ So definitely my outfit will be more elegant.

The word 'address' is incorrect in this context; likely meant 'dress' or 'outfit'. Use 'outfit' or 'dress' and possessive 'my' for clarity. Suggestion: choose the correct noun for clothing ('outfit'/'dress') and include possessive if referring to what you will wear.