Clothing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct word choice, and avoid listing inconsistent items (e.g., ‘cleaning dresses’). Use one or two specific reasons with a linking word. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I usually prefer smart, well-fitted clothes, such as tailored trousers or a neat skirt, because they help me make a good impression and boost my confidence. For example, wearing a blazer to meetings makes me feel more professional and comfortable.

提案: Remove fillers and correct grammar and word choice. Give one clear reason and a short example. Avoid contradictory words (e.g., ‘cheap clothes’ when meaning ‘smart clothes’). Limit to 2–3 sentences and use a linking word.

例: I prefer smart clothes because they make me look and feel more professional. For instance, wearing a neat shirt and trousers to work helps others take me seriously and boosts my confidence.

提案: Be clear and polite. Avoid slang or unclear phrases like ‘naughty shorts’ and ‘dowdy’. Give a short direct answer, explain why with one reason, and offer a brief alternative. Keep it to 1–2 sentences.

例: Not really. I find T-shirts too informal for my style; I prefer dresses or skirts because they look more polished for the occasions I attend.

提案: Good content and clarity — shorten slightly and add a linking word for coherence. Provide a specific example of when you spend more time to make the answer more concrete. Keep within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I often spend extra time choosing clothes because I want to look polished. For example, I usually take more time picking an outfit before a presentation to ensure it looks professional and appropriate.

× I prefer to wear classy and smart clothes such as trousers, shorts, skirts and cleaning dresses because it helps me to create a good impression and feel more comfortable and confident.

✓ I prefer to wear classy and smart clothes such as trousers, shorts, skirts and cleaning dresses because they help me to create a good impression and feel more comfortable and confident.

The subject 'clothes' is plural, so the pronoun and verb referring to it must be plural. 'It helps' incorrectly uses singular 'it'; change to 'they help'. Use plural agreement for clarity.

× Honestly, I prefer to wear smart clothes because I consider myself, uh, very responsible and serious and, uh, in my opinion, I looks more professional in smart, uh, cheap clothes rather than in casual clothes.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to wear smart clothes because I consider myself, uh, very responsible and serious and, uh, in my opinion, I look more professional in smart, uh, cheap clothes rather than in casual clothes.

The subject 'I' requires the base form 'look' not 'looks'. 'Looks' is third person singular. Use 'I look' to match the subject-verb agreement.

× Honestly, I prefer to wear smart clothes because I consider myself, uh, very responsible and serious and, uh, in my opinion, I look more professional in smart, uh, cheap clothes rather than in casual clothes.

✓ Honestly, I prefer to wear smart clothes because I consider myself, uh, very responsible and serious and, uh, in my opinion, I look more professional in smart, well-made clothes rather than in casual clothes.

Calling clothes 'cheap' contradicts 'smart' and may be unintended. Replace with an appropriate adjective like 'well-made' or 'smart' to match meaning. This fixes adjective misuse and improves coherence.

× Do you like wearing T-shirts? Student: Absolutely no, because uh, in my opinion I look dowdy in naughty shorts so I would rather wear umm dress or a skirt with short rather than not T-shirt with uh, track pants.

✓ Do you like wearing T-shirts? Student: Absolutely not, because, uh, in my opinion I look dowdy in short, unfashionable shorts, so I would rather wear a dress or a skirt with tights rather than a T-shirt with, uh, track pants.

Multiple preposition and article issues: use 'not' not 'no' for this response; 'in naughty shorts' is incorrect adjective choice and order—use 'in short, unfashionable shorts' or similar; 'wear umm dress' needs article 'a dress'; 'with short' unclear—likely 'with tights'; 'rather than not T-shirt' should be 'rather than a T-shirt'. Also ensure commas for pauses.

× Do you spend a lot of time choosing clothes? Student: Honestly, yes, I can spend a lot of time getting ready for a special event or just for the casual day because I have a desire to look polished every single day.

✓ Honestly, yes, I can spend a lot of time getting ready for a special event or just for a casual day because I have a desire to look polished every single day.

Use 'a casual day' instead of 'the casual day' for a nonspecific day. 'The' would imply a specific day already mentioned. Use the indefinite article for general statements.