Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and avoid minor grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two supporting details using linking words. Correct plural and possessive forms, and avoid repeating the same idea.

例: Yes, I use headphones regularly. I own two pairs: a large Panasonic for home listening and a small Sony that I take out because it’s more portable.

提案: Organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and logical supporting details. Use correct tense and article usage (a/an/the), and avoid irrelevant remarks (“a staff said before”). Use linking words (for example, so) correctly and keep within 3–4 sentences.

例: I use two types: a large over-ear Panasonic that I usually use at home, and a small Sony in-ear pair that I take on the bus because it’s less likely to get lost.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and then add one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid vague phrasing and keep sentences grammatically correct. Mentioning examples of artists is good—keep it brief and relevant.

例: I usually use headphones for English listening practice and when I listen to music, for example Mariah Carey or Michael Jackson, because they improve sound quality and help me focus.

提案: Start with a clear statement, then explain the reason with correct vocabulary. Avoid awkward phrases like “installation quality.” Use linking words (because, so) properly and correct verb forms and articles.

例: I wouldn’t wear headphones when my family or friends are talking to me because my headphones have very good sound isolation, so I wouldn’t be able to hear them.

提案: Be natural and avoid exaggerated or odd phrases (e.g., “beyond description,” “Random”). Use one clear topic sentence, one supporting detail about fit or padding, and one concise conclusion. Keep sentences cohesive with linking words if needed.

例: Yes, they are very comfortable. The padding fits well around my head, so I can wear them for hours without any discomfort.

× I have two headphones, a big one and a small one.

✓ I have two headphones: a big one and a small one.

The sentence is acceptable but using a colon improves clarity when listing; however the core issue is not plural form. No change in number is needed. Suggestion: keep 'headphones' plural and list items clearly.

× The big one is Panasonic and small one's Sony.

✓ The big one is a Panasonic and the small one is a Sony.

Product names often need an article when described as 'a Panasonic' or 'a Sony' to indicate a unit of that brand. Also add 'the' before 'small one' for parallel structure.

× I use both headphones, but the difference is that the small ones are easy to carry.

✓ I use both headphones, but the difference is that the small one is easy to carry.

The subject refers to a single small headphone (contrasted with a single big headphone), so use singular 'small one' rather than plural 'small ones'. Keep consistency with 'both headphones' meaning two items.

× A staff said before, I have a Panasonic headphone which is larger and a Sony headphone which is smaller.

✓ A staff member said earlier that I have a Panasonic headphone which is larger and a Sony headphone which is smaller.

Use 'staff member' instead of 'staff' when referring to a single person. Use 'earlier' or 'before' in correct position and connect clauses with 'that' for clarity.

× For the large headphones I usually used at home but I'm so scared to lose it so that whenever I went on the bus I always use the small headphone.

✓ I usually use the large headphones at home, but I'm so afraid of losing them that whenever I go on the bus I always use the small headphones.

Tense consistency: 'usually use' (present) fits habitual action. Use 'afraid of losing them' instead of 'scared to lose it'; pronoun agreement: 'headphones' is plural so use 'them'. Use 'go' instead of 'went' for habitual present. Also pluralize 'headphones' consistently.

× I would use headphones when doing English listening practices as well as listening to my favorite artists, which includes Mariah Carey and Michael Jackson.

✓ I use headphones when doing English listening practice as well as listening to my favorite artists, such as Mariah Carey and Michael Jackson.

Use 'practice' (uncountable) rather than 'practices'. For habitual actions in response to 'When would you use headphones?' use present simple 'I use'. Use 'such as' instead of 'which includes' to introduce examples.

× The headphone just makes the quality of the music so much better than without one.

✓ The headphones just make the quality of the music much better than without them.

Match plural 'headphones' with plural verb 'make' and plural pronoun 'them'. Also remove unnecessary 'so' for concision.

× I won't use the headphones if my mom or my friends constantly talking to me because my headphones got a really good sound in installation quality so I won't be able to hear them if I just use my headphone.

✓ I don't use headphones if my mom or my friends are constantly talking to me because my headphones have very good sound and I won't be able to hear them if I wear them.

Use present simple for habitual refusal: 'I don't use'. Use 'are ... talking' (present continuous) for ongoing action. 'Have' is correct for possession/quality. Use 'wear them' rather than 'use my headphone' and keep pronouns/plurals consistent.

× Yes, both my headphones are extremely comfortable beyond description.

✓ Yes, both my headphones are extremely comfortable beyond description.

Sentence is grammatically correct; it uses present simple to state a general truth. No change needed.

× It stays comfortably around my head.

✓ They sit comfortably around my head.

'Headphones' is plural, so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'sit' (not 'stays'). 'Sit around my head' is the usual collocation.

× I never had any issue with them.

✓ I have never had any issues with them.

Use present perfect 'have never had' to indicate up to now. Use plural 'issues' for natural phrasing.

× Random.

✓ That is just random.

Single-word 'Random.' is incomplete and unclear. 'That is just random.' completes the thought and connects to previous sentence.

× It's just an enjoyment.

✓ It's just for enjoyment.

'Enjoyment' as a noun is awkward here; use 'for enjoyment' to express purpose or 'it's just enjoyable' to describe the feeling.