Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy and concision. Use present simple for habitual actions and avoid unnecessary words. Give a clear topic sentence and one brief supporting detail with a linking word.

例: Yes, I do. I usually wear headphones when I travel to school or commute by subway or bus because they help me listen to music and block out noise.

提案: Use correct noun forms and more natural vocabulary. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two concise reasons using linking words (e.g., because, so). Avoid repetition.

例: I usually use wireless earphones because they are convenient and compact, so they’re easy to carry and quick to put on.

提案: Fix tense and clarity. Say the habit in present simple and give a specific situation as support. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetitions.

例: As I mentioned, I use headphones when I want to concentrate or avoid being disturbed by noisy surroundings, for example while studying or commuting.

提案: Give a clear, grammatically correct topic sentence and a concise reason. Use a specific example and linking words. Avoid hesitations and repetition.

例: I wouldn’t use headphones in formal situations, such as meetings or when someone is speaking to the group, because it’s impolite and I need to listen.

提案: Be direct and accurate. Correct the negative response structure, use appropriate adjectives, and give a specific reason. Keep it concise and natural with one supporting detail.

例: Not always. I sometimes find headphones uncomfortable because they press on my ears and can mess up my hair after long use.

× I usually use my headphones when I was on my way to school or other places on the subway or bus.

✓ I usually use my headphones when I am on my way to school or other places on the subway or bus.

The speaker is describing a habitual action in the present, so the past tense 'was' is incorrect. Use present simple or present continuous ('am') to match habitual or current situations. Suggestion: use 'am' for specific trips or 'when I go' for general habitual trips.

× I usually use a wireless earphones because it is convenient and because of its small scale.

✓ I usually use wireless earphones because they are convenient and small.

'A' should not be used with the plural 'earphones'; choose singular or plural consistently. Also use plural pronoun 'they' to refer to 'earphones' and avoid wordy phrase 'because of its small scale.' Suggestion: use 'wireless earphones' and 'they are small'.

× You just need to wear it simply and don't take much time to wear the headphones.

✓ You just need to put them on and it doesn't take much time to wear the headphones.

Pronoun 'it' is incorrect for plural 'headphones'; use 'them.' Also structure improved: 'put them on' is natural; use 'it doesn't take much time' to agree with the action. Suggestion: replace 'wear it' with 'put them on' and match subject with singular 'it' for the action.

× As I mentioned before, I I would use headphones when I was when I want to be quiet and don't and don't be impacted by the surroundings.

✓ As I mentioned before, I would use headphones when I want to be quiet and not be affected by the surroundings.

Mixing conditional 'would' with wrong past tense 'was' and repetition causes confusion. Use 'want' (present) after 'when' to indicate a condition; use 'not be affected' rather than 'don't be impacted.' Suggestion: remove duplicate words and use consistent tense and natural phrasing.

× So it is the case.

✓ So that's the case.

Original phrasing is awkward. Use contracted form 'that's the case' or 'so that's why' for natural spoken English. Suggestion: choose concise, idiomatic expression.

× For example, I would like to say it is the meeting, so other leader will will say something to the employees so it is not polite to.

✓ For example, during a meeting, a leader may speak to employees, so it would not be polite to wear headphones.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and repeats words ('will will') and ends abruptly. Restructure to indicate condition ('during a meeting') and use modal 'would' to show politeness. Suggestion: reorganize sentence to subject-verb-object order and complete the clause.

× No I think so.

✓ No, I don't think so.

The speaker intended to disagree, but 'No I think so' affirms. Use negative 'I don't think so' to express disagreement. Suggestion: include a comma and the auxiliary 'do' for negative present simple.

× In my opinion wearing headphones will make me some uncomfortable because you need to wear your headphones to cover your head and it is make your hair fall.

✓ In my opinion, wearing headphones makes me a bit uncomfortable because they press on your head and can make your hair fall out.

Several issues: missing comma after introductory phrase; 'make me some uncomfortable' is incorrect — use 'make me a bit uncomfortable' or 'makes me uncomfortable' (subject-verb agreement); 'you need to wear your headphones to cover your head' is unnatural — use 'they press on your head'; 'it is make your hair fall' is ungrammatical — use 'can make your hair fall out.' Suggestion: fix agreement, use natural verbs ('press on'), and add modal 'can' to indicate possibility.