Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer directly addresses the question and is natural, but you can improve by using a clearer topic sentence and a brief supporting detail with linking word. Also avoid redundant phrasing like “listen to the music” and “clearly” together. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I often use headphones when I travel or commute. For example, they let me enjoy music or podcasts without disturbing other passengers.

提案: The answer contains good ideas but is long, repetitive and has grammar issues. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the type, then give one or two concise reasons using linking words (for example, because, so). Avoid repeating 'since' and fix noun/verb forms.

例: I usually use wireless earbuds because they are compact and connect easily via Bluetooth. For instance, they are more convenient than wired models since there are no cables to get tangled.

提案: Your response repeats earlier points and includes an unclear phrase about 'speak clearly' and a mistaken reference to 'Airbus'. Make a concise topic sentence and give a specific example of situations and purpose. Correct factual or vocabulary errors and avoid irrelevant brand mentions unless you explain them.

例: I mainly use headphones while commuting or on flights to block out background noise and enjoy music. For example, I wear noise‑cancelling earbuds on long train journeys to concentrate on a podcast.

提案: Good, direct answer with a clear reason. Improve by polishing language (avoid 'obviously' and 'intend to be') and adding one brief alternative action you would take instead to enrich the response.

例: I wouldn’t wear headphones at a party because I’d miss conversations and the atmosphere. Instead, I’d join the group and listen to the music being played.

提案: The answer is short and partly unclear with awkward phrases (“cannot almost feel it”, “just like the music, it's keeps coming in your ears”). Give a clear topic sentence, then one specific reason with correct grammar. Use a linking word for cohesion.

例: Yes, I find my earbuds comfortable because they are lightweight and fit snugly in my ears. As a result, I can wear them for hours without discomfort.

× Yes, I use headphones usually when I travel or commute so I can listen to the music clearly without distracting others.

✓ Yes, I usually use headphones when I travel or commute so I can listen to music clearly without distracting others.

Adverb placement (type 20): 'usually' should be placed before the main verb 'use' to follow normal English word order. Also 'the music' is unnecessary; use 'music' generically. Move 'usually' for natural flow and remove the article for uncountable noun.

× I use earbud type of headphones since I find it more convenient and useful rather than headphones with wired ones since you can just connect it to Bluetooth and with that you can listen to music or podcast without worrying about the wires that hanging around your ears.

✓ I use earbud-type headphones because I find them more convenient and useful than wired headphones, since you can connect them via Bluetooth and listen to music or podcasts without worrying about wires hanging around your ears.

Article and noun forms (types 22 and 1) and comparative structure (type 16): 'earbud type of headphones' should be 'earbud-type headphones'. Use 'them' to agree with plural 'headphones'. Use 'than wired headphones' not 'rather than headphones with wired ones'. Use 'via Bluetooth' and plural 'podcasts'. Remove redundant 'that' and correct 'hanging' placement.

× I mainly use headphones whenever I'm traveling so that I can listen to music while commuting without disturbing other people and also whenever I need to speak clearly without the noise since Airbus has has its design for noise cancellation.

✓ I mainly use headphones when I'm traveling so I can listen to music while commuting without disturbing other people, and also when I need to hear clearly without noise because Airbus has designed them for noise cancellation.

Third person and verb form issues (types 2 and 9) and word choice: 'has has' is a typo and incorrect. Replace with 'has designed' (present perfect or simple past depending on meaning). 'Speak clearly' is wrong in context; listener wants to 'hear' clearly. Simplify 'whenever' to 'when' for conciseness.

× Obviously I would not use headphones whenever I'm at party since parties intend to be loud and if I use headphones I will miss the fun.

✓ Obviously I would not use headphones when I'm at a party, since parties tend to be loud, and if I used headphones I would miss the fun.

Preposition and article errors (types 11 and 22) and tense/modal consistency (type 7): use 'at a party' not 'at party'. 'Intend to be loud' is wrong word choice; use 'tend to be loud'. For hypothetical consequence, use conditional 'if I used... I would' for naturalness.

× Yes, headphones are comfortable. It's so lightweight that you cannot almost feel it. It's just like the music, it's keeps coming in your ears.

✓ Yes, headphones are comfortable. They are so lightweight that you can hardly feel them. It's just like the music; it keeps coming into your ears.

Pronoun and adjective/adverb issues (types 12 and 13): 'It's' refers to headphones (plural) so use 'They are'. 'Cannot almost feel it' is ungrammatical; use 'you can hardly feel them'. 'It's keeps' is incorrect subject-verb agreement; use 'it keeps'. 'Coming in your ears' should be 'coming into your ears' for correct preposition.