Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but a few improvements will raise your score: 1) Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. “No, I usually use earphones.”). 2) Avoid minor grammar errors and redundancy (e.g. say “earphones” consistently and correct articles: “a Samsung Galaxy pair of earphones” or “Samsung Galaxy earphones”). 3) Use one linking phrase to add the detail (e.g. “because” or “since”) and keep the response to no more than 4 sentences. 4) Add a brief specific detail about how long you’ve had them or why you like them (comfort, sound quality) to enrich the answer.

例: No, I usually use earphones. I prefer them because they are lighter and more compact than headphones. I’ve been using a pair of Samsung Galaxy earphones I got with my phone a few years ago, and they are comfortable for daily use.

提案: Good intention repeating your preference, but avoid repetition and small grammar mistakes. 1) Begin with a clear topic sentence: “I don’t use over-ear headphones; I use in-ear earphones.” 2) Reduce redundancy (don’t repeat earlier point verbatim). 3) Correct noun–verb and article errors (“earphones are lighter,” “an earphones” → “a pair of earphones” or “earphones with noise-cancelling”). 4) Use a linking word to introduce the feature you like: “and” or “because.”

例: I don’t use over-ear headphones; I use in-ear earphones instead because they’re more convenient and lightweight. I prefer a pair with noise-cancelling features to block out background noise when I travel.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be more natural and concise. 1) Use a direct topic sentence: “I usually wear earphones when I commute to work.” 2) Improve grammar and phrasing (“to make me more enthusiastic” → “to lift my mood” or “to get me energized”). 3) Combine the two sentences with a linking word for coherence. 4) Add a specific detail about the commute length or what you listen to to enrich the response.

例: I usually wear earphones when I commute to work because listening to upbeat music helps me feel more energized for the day. My commute is about 45 minutes, so music makes the journey more enjoyable.

提案: This is a clear and informative answer with good reasons. To improve: 1) Start with a concise topic sentence: “I don’t wear headphones at work.” 2) Make a small phrasing improvement for naturalness (“execute my tasks properly” instead of “execute my task or my work sufficiently”). 3) Use a linking word (“because” is correct) and keep it to two or three sentences. 4) Optionally give a specific example of a situation at work when clear hearing is essential.

例: I don’t wear headphones at work because I’m a trader and I need to hear voice brokers clearly. For example, during fast-paced trading calls I must respond immediately, so wearing earphones would be impractical.

提案: Your answer communicates your view but has repetition and grammar issues. 1) Begin with a direct sentence: “No, I don’t find headphones comfortable.” 2) Fix grammar and redundancy (“more more bulky” → “bulkier,” “takes out much space” → “take up a lot of space”). 3) Use one linking phrase to explain why and provide a specific example (e.g., they hurt my ears after long use or they’re heavy in my bag). 4) Keep it within two or three sentences for clarity.

例: No, I don’t find headphones comfortable. They tend to be bulkier and take up a lot of space in my bag, and after a long commute they can feel heavy on my head.

× I have a Samsung Galaxy earphones as a freebie from the phone I purchased few years back.

✓ I have Samsung Galaxy earphones as a freebie from the phone I purchased a few years back.

Incorrect article usage with plural noun and missing 'a' before 'few years'. 'Earphones' is plural so drop 'a'. Add 'a' before 'few years back' to mean an indefinite small number of years. Also remove extra 'a' before 'Samsung' because brand plus plural noun does not need 'a'.

× I prefer using earphones due to its convenience and the fact that it is lighter than the headphones.

✓ I prefer using earphones due to their convenience and the fact that they are lighter than headphones.

Pronoun agreement: 'earphones' is plural so use 'their' and 'they are'. Also with general plural nouns, do not use 'the' unless specifying particular headphones; 'lighter than headphones' is more natural.

× Personally, I prefer an earphones with noise cancelling setup.

✓ Personally, I prefer earphones with a noise-cancelling setup.

'Earphones' is plural and should not take the article 'an'. Add the article 'a' before 'noise-cancelling setup' and hyphenate 'noise-cancelling' as a compound adjective.

× As I mentioned earlier, I'm not using headphones.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I don't use headphones.

Present continuous ('I'm not using') implies a temporary action; for general preference habitual action use simple present 'I don't use'. This matches context about general habits.

× I prefer using earphones due to its convenience and the fact that it is lighter than the headphones.

✓ I prefer using earphones due to their convenience and the fact that they are lighter than headphones.

Same as earlier: pronouns must agree in number with 'earphones' (plural), so use 'their' and 'they are'. Avoid redundant 'the' before general 'headphones'.

× I typically use it when I'm about to travel from home to the office.

✓ I typically use them when I'm about to travel from home to the office.

Pronoun 'it' refers to 'earphones' which is plural, so use 'them'.

× I use it as a way to listen to music in order for me to be more enthusiastic about my day.

✓ I use them as a way to listen to music to be more enthusiastic about my day.

Replace 'in order for me to' with the simpler 'to' for purpose. Also change 'it' to 'them' for plural and remove redundant phrasing.

× I prefer not using headphones when I'm at work since I'm a trader and most of my transactions are done via voice brokers, so I need to be able to hear what my brokers are saying so that I can execute my task or my work sufficiently.

✓ I prefer not to use headphones when I'm at work since I'm a trader and most of my transactions are done via voice brokers, so I need to be able to hear what my brokers are saying so that I can carry out my work effectively.

Use the correct infinitive 'prefer not to use' instead of 'prefer not using'. 'Execute my task or my work sufficiently' is awkward; 'carry out my work effectively' is clearer and more natural.

× As I mentioned earlier, I prefer using earphones than headphones due to its convenience and ease of use.

✓ As I mentioned earlier, I prefer earphones to headphones due to their convenience and ease of use.

Use the correct comparison structure 'prefer X to Y' not 'prefer X than Y'. Also fix pronoun agreement: 'earphones' plural -> 'their'.

× I do not find headphones comfortable since they're more more bulky and takes out much space in my bag.

✓ I do not find headphones comfortable since they're more bulky and take up a lot of space in my bag.

'More more' is a duplication; use a single 'more'. Verb agreement: 'they take' matches plural 'headphones'. Use 'take up' for occupying space and 'a lot of' instead of 'much' for natural spoken English.