Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve clarity, grammar and conciseness. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct pronouns and verb forms, avoid repetition, and give specific examples. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, “for example” or “such as”).

例: Yes, I often use headphones. I use them to listen to music, podcasts and audiobooks while travelling or studying. For example, I listen to news podcasts in the morning and music in the evenings to relax.

提案: Use correct tense and expand slightly with a reason or brief comparison. Start with a direct answer, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words like “because” or “since.”

例: I use Apple AirPods because they are lightweight and comfortable. Also, they connect easily to my phone, so I can move around without dealing with cables.

提案: Correct verb forms and reduce filler words. Give a clear topic sentence and organise examples with linking words (for instance, “when I’m commuting” and “also when”).

例: I usually use headphones when I’m commuting, for example on the metro or bus. I also wear them when I walk home alone or when I want to concentrate on studying.

提案: Be more concise and natural. Use correct plural forms and remove filler sounds. Provide a clear condition and brief reason, using linking words such as “because” or “unless.”

例: I don’t use headphones when I’m out with someone and we are talking because I want to listen and respond. Unless I need privacy, I usually leave them off in social situations.

提案: Correct grammar and be specific. Use a topic sentence then a brief explanation with reasons or exceptions. Replace “annoyed” with “annoy” and add details about comfort or potential drawbacks.

例: Yes, I find wearing headphones comfortable because they block outside noise and allow me to listen without disturbing others. However, they can be uncomfortable after long periods, especially if they don’t fit well.

× Yes, I use it because it's more important for me because I listen anytime something out your books, music, podcast and uh, some like that and news.

✓ Yes, I use them because they are important to me; I listen to music, podcasts, audiobooks, news, and similar things anytime.

Pronoun error: 'it' refers to headphones (plural) so use 'them'. Also 'more important for me' is awkward; use 'important to me'. 'listen anytime something out your books' is ungrammatical and likely meant 'listen to audiobooks' or 'listen anytime to music, podcasts, audiobooks, news'. Use parallel list with commas and correct preposition 'listen to'. Improve by matching pronoun number and using correct prepositions and noun forms.

× I used the Airpods because it's more comfortable.

✓ I use AirPods because they are more comfortable.

Tense and agreement: The student used past tense 'I used' incorrectly; the question asks current use so present tense 'I use' is appropriate. 'AirPods' is plural so pronoun 'they' and verb 'are' should be used instead of 'it's'. Also 'more comfortable' is fine but must agree with plural subject.

× I used the headphones when I walk alone, uh, in the transport, uh, in the metro, in the bus or going uh, to home.

✓ I use headphones when I walk alone or when I'm on public transport, such as the metro or the bus, or when I'm going home.

Tense: 'I used' is past; the question asks when the student would use them, so present simple or habitual present 'I use' or 'I wear' is better. 'in the transport' should be 'on public transport' or 'on transport'. 'going to home' is incorrect; use 'going home' or 'on the way home'. Also keep consistent verb forms and clarify with examples.

× When I'm out with, uh, someone and we talk, uh, any issues, I don't, uh, I don't use the headphone.

✓ When I'm out with someone and we talk about something, I don't use headphones.

Pronoun and article: 'the headphone' is incorrect for general plural; use 'headphones' (plural). Also sentence was awkward: 'we talk, any issues' likely meant 'we talk' or 'we have a conversation'. Remove unnecessary words and use correct noun number. Keep present tense for habitual action.

× Yes, it's more comfortable because you don't annoyed anyone.

✓ Yes, they are more comfortable because you don't annoy anyone.

Pronoun and verb form: 'it's' incorrectly treats headphones as singular; use 'they are'. 'you don't annoyed' mixes base and past participle; correct base form is 'you don't annoy'. Use present tense for general truth and ensure subject-verb agreement.