Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers, and fix errors (e.g., “every day” not “every day my life”; “as” -> “as”) Use 2–3 supporting details with linking words. Vary vocabulary (e.g., concentrate, block out).

例: Yes. I use headphones every day to study because they help me concentrate during listening tasks. For example, they block out background noise, so I can focus on the IELTS audio without interruptions.

提案: Organise answer with a clear topic sentence and parallel structure. Correct singular/plural and article use (an on-ear headphone, a gaming headset). Use linking words and concise descriptions (e.g., comfortable, noise-cancelling).

例: I have two pairs of headphones. One is an on-ear headphone I use for studying because it’s lightweight and comfortable; the other is a gaming headset with a microphone that I use when I play on my computer.

提案: Good structure and relevance. Improve by avoiding contractions and slightly expanding with a linking phrase. Be specific about times and effects. Replace informal phrasing (e.g., “arguing or shouting”) with neutral descriptions if needed.

例: I use headphones every day, particularly when I travel home from university. For instance, they help me relax after a long day and block out surrounding noise on the bus, so I can listen to music or podcasts without distractions.

提案: Strong answer with clear reasons. Improve fluency by using linking words and cleaner grammar (e.g., “so I can” not “so I could”). Keep it concise and avoid repetition of 'I don't want'.

例: I avoid using headphones when I’m with friends or family because I want to join the conversation and not appear rude. This way I can listen and interact with them easily.

提案: Provide a clearer topic sentence and more precise detail about the discomfort. Use linking words like 'however' correctly and correct phrasing (e.g., 'because they press against my ears' or 'they feel tight over a hat'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Generally, wearing headphones is comfortable because I’m used to them. However, in winter they can feel tight over my hat and press against my ears, which is slightly uncomfortable.

× Yes, I use them every day my life to study.

✓ Yes, I use them every day in my life to study.

The original sentence lacks a correct prepositional phrase connecting 'every day' and 'my life'. This is a sentence structure issue; adding 'in' creates the idiomatic phrase 'in my life'. However, more natural versions are 'Yes, I use them every day to study' or 'Yes, I use them in my daily life to study.' Use those for clarity.

× Umm, it's better to focus when you use headphones during listening tasks for IELTS exam.

✓ Umm, it's better to focus when you use headphones during listening tasks for the IELTS exam.

The noun phrase 'IELTS exam' requires the definite article 'the' in this context. This is an article error: use 'the IELTS exam' to refer to the specific exam.

× It helps me to fully focus on the task and as a extraneous sounds don't interrupt me.

✓ It helps me to fully focus on the task and prevents extraneous sounds from interrupting me.

The original mixes structures and uses an incorrect pronoun and article ('a extraneous sounds'). This is a pronoun/article and sentence structure problem. Recast the second clause with a verb 'prevents' and change to 'extraneous sounds' (no 'a') and use the gerund 'from interrupting' for correct idiomatic form.

× Now I have two headphones, first is on ear headphone which I use for my studies for an IELTS preparation which is convenient and modern and the second one is a gaming headphones.

✓ Now I have two headphones: the first is an on-ear headphone which I use for my IELTS preparation; it is convenient and modern, and the second one is a gaming headset.

There are singular/plural and article errors: 'two headphones' is acceptable but listing requires singular forms 'the first is an on-ear headphone' and 'the second is a gaming headset' (use 'headset' rather than plural 'headphones'). Also add articles 'the' and 'an' and hyphenate 'on-ear' for clarity.

× I use them when I play some games on my computer.

✓ I use them when I play games on my computer.

'Some' is unnecessary in this context; removing it makes the sentence more natural. This is a minor sentence structure/style improvement rather than a strict grammatical error.

× They'll help me feel relaxed after a long day and block out noise on the bus so I don't have to listen to other people arguing or shouting.

✓ They help me feel relaxed after a long day and block out noise on the bus, so I don't have to listen to other people arguing or shouting.

The modal contraction 'They'll' (they will) suggests future but the speaker describes a habitual action. Use present simple 'They help' for habitual statements (third person plural subject with base verb). Also add a comma before 'so' for clarity.

× When I'm in the group of people, for example with my friends or family, I try not to use headphones so I could listen to them clearly and participate in the conversation because I don't want to feel isolated and I don't want them to feel like I don't care about them.

✓ When I'm in a group of people, for example with my friends or family, I try not to use headphones so I can listen to them clearly and participate in the conversation, because I don't want to feel isolated and I don't want them to think I don't care about them.

Use 'in a group' not 'in the group'; this is a preposition/article choice. Also change 'could' to 'can' to express ability in present context. Replace 'feel like I don't care about them' with 'think I don't care about them' for natural expression.

× Yes, I am used to wearing headphones every day so they feel very comfortable to me.

✓ Yes, I am used to wearing headphones every day, so they feel very comfortable to me.

The original is mostly correct but needs a comma before 'so' for clarity. 'Am used to wearing' correctly expresses habituation (present state). This is a punctuation and clarity adjustment within present tense usage.

× However, in winter they can be slightly uncomfortable because it presses the headphones.

✓ However, in winter they can be slightly uncomfortable because they press on my ears.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to a plural antecedent 'they'; this is incorrect pronoun use. Also 'presses the headphones' is awkward; more natural is 'they press on my ears.' Use matching plural pronoun 'they' and clarify the object affected.