Headphones— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more precise and avoid hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Correct word choice: say “earbuds” or “in-ear headphones” instead of “airports.”

例: Yes, I use headphones very often. I usually use small earbuds because they are lightweight and fit easily in my pocket, so I can carry them whenever I travel.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence naming the type, then add one specific feature with a linking word. Eliminate fillers and correct grammar (singular/plural and word order).

例: I usually use wireless earbuds. They are lightweight and compact, so I can quickly take them out of my pocket and put them on when I need them.

提案: Begin with a clear statement of when you use them, then give a specific reason. Avoid vague phrases and pronunciation errors; use linking words like “because” to connect ideas. Use correct verb forms and articles.

例: I usually use headphones when I’m in public or next to other people because I don’t want others to hear what I’m listening to and I want to protect my privacy.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence stating when you avoid them, then explain why with a specific consequence. Improve grammar: use correct tenses and plural/singular forms. Use linking words like “so” and “therefore.”

例: I avoid using headphones when I’m alone or for long periods because excessive use can damage my hearing, so I prefer to play music out loud occasionally instead.

提案: Give a clear direct answer then support it with a brief explanation and contrast using linking words like “at first” and “now.” Correct phrasing and remove redundancies.

例: At first, wearing earbuds felt uncomfortable because I could feel something in my ear, but now I’m used to them and they feel fine for most of the day.

× Yes, very often. And I use, uh, airports more, uh, because it's very convenient for me to take it with me.

✓ Yes, very often. And I use AirPods more because they are very convenient for me to take with me.

The student used 'airports' (incorrect noun) and 'it' for a plural object. Also 'to take it with me' is awkward; use 'take with me'. Correcting to 'AirPods' (brand/name) and plural pronoun 'they' fixes noun and agreement; this falls under present participle form only insofar as continuous actions are not involved, but the main error is noun/pronoun and phrasing. Suggestion: use the correct noun and match pronouns to number; keep verbs simple present for habits.

× Umm, as I mentioned, I use airports because they are very lightweight and easy to carry and whenever I want to use it, I can just it get it out from my pocket and use it.

✓ Umm, as I mentioned, I use AirPods because they are very lightweight and easy to carry; whenever I want to use them, I can just take them out of my pocket and use them.

Errors include wrong singular pronouns 'it' and extra words 'just it get it'; verbs and pronouns must agree with the plural noun AirPods. This is a third person singular/number agreement issue: use 'them' (plural) not 'it'. Also correct verb phrase to 'take them out'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun matches noun number and use the correct verb sequence ('take out of').

× Well, I use headphones, uh, when there's someone, uh, beside with me, you know, I don't really want other people know what I'm looking for in my phone.

✓ Well, I use headphones when there is someone beside me; I don't really want other people to know what I'm looking at on my phone.

Problems: 'beside with me' is incorrect preposition usage — use 'beside me' or 'next to me'. Also missing 'to' before 'know' (infinitive marker) and incorrect verb/preposition 'looking for in my phone' should be 'looking at on my phone' (depending on meaning). Suggestion: use correct prepositions ('beside me', 'on my phone') and include 'to' for infinitive verbs ('to know').

× So I always use headphone to pre protect my, uh, privacy.

✓ So I always use headphones to protect my privacy.

'Headphone' should be plural 'headphones' to match typical usage; 'pre protect' is redundant/incorrect — use 'protect'. This is a pronoun/noun number and word choice issue: use correct noun form and single verb. Suggestion: eliminate redundancy and ensure noun number matches context.

× Well you know use too much headphone will harm to my ears, so I whenever I got when I was alone I will not use headphone anymore and I just let the voice to be loud and I can enjoy it by myself.

✓ Well, using headphones too much will harm my ears, so when I am alone I don't use them anymore; I just turn the volume up and enjoy it by myself.

Multiple issues: incorrect structure 'use too much headphone' should be gerund phrase 'using headphones too much' and 'harm to my ears' should be 'harm my ears' (no 'to'). 'Whenever I got when I was alone' is ungrammatical; use 'when I am alone'. Pronouns and noun number: use 'them' for headphones. 'Let the voice to be loud' is incorrect — use 'turn the volume up' or 'make the sound louder'. Suggestion: use gerund for general statements about actions, correct verb complements (harm + object), proper tense for habitual present ('when I am alone I don't use them'), and natural collocations ('turn the volume up').

× Well, at first I wear a headphone. I feel not really comfortable 'cause, you know, there's always something stuck in your ear, you are feel it.

✓ Well, at first I wore headphones. I didn't feel very comfortable because, you know, there was always something stuck in my ear and I could feel it.

Tense and agreement errors: for a past situation use past tense 'wore' and 'didn't feel'. 'You are feel it' is ungrammatical; use 'I could feel it' or 'I felt it'. Also noun number: 'headphone' should be plural 'headphones'. Suggestion: match past-tense verbs for past experiences and use correct pronouns ('I') and verb forms ('could feel').

× But now the more I use, the more I feel not really about it.

✓ But now the more I use them, the less bothered I feel about them.

Problems with adjective/adverb choice and sentence structure: 'feel not really about it' is ungrammatical. Use comparative structure 'the more... the less...' and appropriate adjective 'bothered' to express discomfort decreasing. Also match pronouns and plurality: 'them' for headphones. Suggestion: use standard comparative patterns and choose correct adjectives ('bothered', 'uncomfortable') and pronouns.